ACDCfan94

Hey everyone! Here's one of my songs. It's called "Feel The Same Way I Do".
It is supposed to be pop/rock song. I would greatly appreciate your feedback and tips!

Feel The Same Way I Do

Verse 1:
I’m standin’ in a crowd/You’re the only one I see/
I’m lookin’ all around/and it’s only you and me/
I can feel something startin’/startin’ deep inside/
Boy, I think I want you in my life/

Chorus:
So, here we are now/Just you and me together/
If only you could tell me how you feel/Yeah, Yeah/
The perfect moment/ Won’t cha, tell me, tell me/
How you really feel/‘cuz I wanna know/
If you feel the same way I do/

Verse 2:
I’m standin’ in a crowd/You’re the only one I see/
I’m lookin’ all around/and it’s only you and me/
I can feel something startin’/startin’ deep inside/
Boy, I really want you in my life/

Chorus:
So, here we are now/Just you and me together/
If only you could tell me how you feel/Yeah, Yeah/
The perfect moment/Won’t cha, tell me, tell me/
How you really feel/‘cuz I wanna know/
If you feel the same way I do/

Bridge:
I’m tryin’ to figure out the answer to my question here/Won’t you give me the answer that I wanna hear/

Chorus:
So, here we are now/Just you and me together/
If only you could tell me how you feel/ Yeah, Yeah/
The perfect moment/Won’t cha, tell me, tell me/
How you really feel/‘cuz I wanna know/
If you feel the same way I do/

So, here we are now/Just you and me together/
If only you could tell me how you feel/ Yeah, Yeah/
The perfect moment/Won’t cha, tell me, tell me/
How you really feel/‘cuz I wanna know/
If you feel the same way I do/

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Rebecca

t3hplatyz0rz

I think that this is overall some pretty good lyrics. But I think that their placement could have been better. It seems to me that you use the chorus 4 times throughout the song, and the verse only 2 times, plus a little tiny bridge. I think that people will get tired of hearing the chorus so many times. I would advise you to write more verses.
This isn't to say that it's the end of the world. If you've spaced out the choruses and verses and stuff with lots of solos and instrumentals, then it would probably work too.

You're writing about a universal theme, which is good. I think that people often think love songs are cliche, but I disagree. There are some things which just don't become cliche.

BillyShears

Depends on the kind of love song and the story of the love song. Anyway, good stuff, man. If it's meant to be pop rock you sure succeeded with it. The public would eat that up! And it's not trash either! That's what the public tends to eat.

ACDCfan94

Thanx guys! I really appreciate your feedback!

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Rebecca

Rawrbabble

lol i can hear the beat to this song building in my mind. It has potential.

but anyways, its a good starts. Personally i would use what you have as a verse as a prechorus. or perhaps even the chorus. itself. It does have the feeling of being a little redundant. But honestly, put this song to some guitar and some drums and you could have a new hit song . Very well written with the exception of the repetitiveness. Keep writing, you may find yourself with something fantastic.

Cheers!

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storymilo

Generally I think verses are different than the ones that come before them.

gogojessicat

i think story has a point.

that being said, i think that the 1st verse should be the chorus!! i reaaally like it tho! that verse is super cute.

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storymilo

For some reason I imagine this song sung by a slightly more nasally version of the singer from Journey.

marcmischief

I like, there are a couple of clichés but it's hard to find lyrics that don't contain clichés

Thats the only constructive criticism i can think of though

gogojessicat

i was thinking it should be sung by avril lavigne. is that awful? or maybe taylor swift. hehe.

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