Can you take a look at this? Lyrics I'm working on.

KyleSingsToYou · 04-21-2010, 03:28 PM

Alright so basically this song is more on the angry side. I rarely tread in that direction, but I'm trying it on for size.

This song is about how me and the girl I love are always kept apart by something or someone, and we always just tell each other "It'll be okay, we'll head to the moon someday" Meaning that all we need is each other, and since we're in a long-distance relationship, we always talk about just dropping everything and going somewhere together.

It's very much incomplete, and it's not going to be in standard song format.
I'll hopefully get a chance to finish it in the coming days, and I'll post the rest for you all. I hope that helps you understand where I was going with this a little more clearly.

Here's the lyrics:

Quote:

We're caught between the storms that never mattered.
Let's head to the armoire of stitched smiles stashed in the basement.
We'll stay content with who we are, driving our space cars.
Nurse the dream that hasn't ended and stay like this forever.

We don't f***ing need anyone or anything.
Bypass the masses of misspent souls hellbent on witnessing our demise
I'll mix the antidote that keeps the poison from our past away.
Drink up beautiful, it's time to smile.
It starts today.

"One love? Try one lie. One false hope. A thorn in my f***ing side."
f**k your inability to mold a non-melancholic thought.

The last two lines are for the very end of the song. So everything else I add will be be before that.
I never scream when I play music, it's always just me and my acoustic guitar or piano. This time I picked up an electric guitar and screamed, and it felt damn good. So that's how this one will be played.

Constructive criticism is most appreciated. Thanks in advance.