ocean and silence's sentience

Arya Stark · 10-12-2009, 12:56 PM

Eh. I wouldn't add anything extra. I really like the acoustic.

OceanAndSilence · 10-12-2009, 12:58 PM

most of the songs i've written i can hear more than just acoustic. some don't work out as well as i planned, babel might be one of them. what i'm going to add will be very subtle

Arya Stark · 10-12-2009, 01:02 PM

You can have two versions.

One for me.

And the electronic one. xD

OceanAndSilence · 10-13-2009, 03:17 PM

i'll take some drugs first

Arya Stark · 10-13-2009, 09:07 PM

Okay, cool.

OceanAndSilence · 10-15-2009, 02:13 PM

drugs are NOT cool! don't listen to her, children!

Arya Stark · 10-15-2009, 02:16 PM

False alarm.

I thought my song was ready.

OceanAndSilence · 10-15-2009, 02:50 PM

hah, i'll message you when it is. for now i'll put up the second song/lyrics i ever wrote. it's about not really being confident in my songwriting ability and issues of conforming. apparently i'm an issues man

tall tree

the taller i grow, the more i sway
harsh winds blow from all sides
each tree's growing its roots deeper each day
and we sometimes let that growth fall to waste

so my eyes are unhatched eggs
which make my mind beg
to use my words but
my ears fear what they'll hear
yet i ignore it, and smell the roses

the water in my hands is running through my fingers
the soil at my feet stays parched
it's easy to see we can't stay this way
lest all the roots and leaves wither in our path.

and my eyes are unhatched eggs
which make my mind beg
to use my words but
my ears fear what they'll hear
yet i ignore it, and smell the roses

pretty simple, but i enjoy playing it, so i usually start my sets with it.

OceanAndSilence · 11-04-2009, 08:11 AM

i will have recordings of some of my songs up soon. here is my latest foray, entitled 'happy days'

doesn't matter where i go
there's no one i know
it's all senseless words
in measured indulgences

sadness dapples the streets
in the glances that fail to meet my eyes
and it all conflates to
an overwhelming trinket

it's raining again

raining... inside my head

i've been digging a long time
i know you must get low for the gold
under all that dirt makes me feel to let go

it's raining again

raining... inside my head

[bridge]
rainin' repeatx8
and i'm runnin'
runninx8

runnin' away, again

when my skin is splotched and my hairs are grey
and all the dross of life has floated away
i'll look back upon this place
thinking "those were the happy days"

thinking... these are the happy days.

once i get the mix/master of the song i'll upload it... i recorded it (with a vintage tape machine!) today.

VEGANGELICA · 11-09-2009, 11:17 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by OceanAndSilence

babel

over centuries we built brittle sheds
now we wander over weathered treads

we fill the cusp of death valley
we wait for the deluge to flow our way

in fractured ruins we ululate, and throw it all away.

Hi OceanAndSilence,
I listened to both "Babel" and "Happy Days" and especially like the shifts in energy in "Babel," which has a lot in it musically. I didn't expect that because the lyrics are so short! I enjoy the thoughtfulness of your lyrics--they have a wide scope (looking at humanity's tendencies, divisions, lack of appreciation for things, and feelings).

Quote:

Originally Posted by OceanAndSilence

i will have recordings of some of my songs up soon. here is my latest foray, entitled 'happy days'

doesn't matter where i go
there's no one i know
it's all senseless words
in measured indulgences

sadness dapples the streets
in the glances that fail to meet my eyes
and it all conflates to
an overwhelming trinket

it's raining again

raining... inside my head

i've been digging a long time
i know you must get low for the gold
under all that dirt makes me feel to let go

it's raining again

raining... inside my head

[bridge]
rainin' repeatx8
and i'm runnin'
runninx8

runnin' away, again

when my skin is splotched and my hairs are grey
and all the dross of life has floated away
i'll look back upon this place
thinking "those were the happy days"

thinking... these are the happy days.

once i get the mix/master of the song i'll upload it... i recorded it (with a vintage tape machine!) today.

I especially like the line, "in the glances that fail to meet my eyes" because I also feel it is sad when people walk along streets ignoring each other, and the line, "all the dross of life has floated away" to describe what you think it may feel like becoming old.

I had wondered, reading the lyrics, if the phrase "happy days" would trouble me when I listened to it (because I probably watched all the "Happy Days" episodes with the Fonz when I was growing up), but it didn't...it felt more like the nostalgia of looking back on life, which is what I think you meant.

One line I was confused about was "under all that dirt makes me feel to let go." Do you mean it makes you feel like you *want* to let go? I felt as if some words were missing.

The "Happy Days" song is much more leisurely than the first song, with fewer unexpected changes musically, so it may not hold people's interest as well as the first one does (which depends on the person, of course!). In both songs I like all the emotion you put into them...you seem very much in the moment, and that comes across in your singing/playing.

--Erica

10-12-2009, 12:58 PM	#2 (permalink)
OceanAndSilence i write and play stuff Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Sydney, Australia Posts: 239	most of the songs i've written i can hear more than just acoustic. some don't work out as well as i planned, babel might be one of them. what i'm going to add will be very subtle

10-13-2009, 03:17 PM	#4 (permalink)
OceanAndSilence i write and play stuff Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Sydney, Australia Posts: 239	i'll take some drugs first

10-15-2009, 02:13 PM	#6 (permalink)
OceanAndSilence i write and play stuff Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Sydney, Australia Posts: 239	drugs are NOT cool! don't listen to her, children!

10-15-2009, 02:50 PM	#8 (permalink)
OceanAndSilence i write and play stuff Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Sydney, Australia Posts: 239	hah, i'll message you when it is. for now i'll put up the second song/lyrics i ever wrote. it's about not really being confident in my songwriting ability and issues of conforming. apparently i'm an issues man tall tree the taller i grow, the more i sway harsh winds blow from all sides each tree's growing its roots deeper each day and we sometimes let that growth fall to waste so my eyes are unhatched eggs which make my mind beg to use my words but my ears fear what they'll hear yet i ignore it, and smell the roses the water in my hands is running through my fingers the soil at my feet stays parched it's easy to see we can't stay this way lest all the roots and leaves wither in our path. and my eyes are unhatched eggs which make my mind beg to use my words but my ears fear what they'll hear yet i ignore it, and smell the roses pretty simple, but i enjoy playing it, so i usually start my sets with it.

11-04-2009, 08:11 AM	#9 (permalink)
OceanAndSilence i write and play stuff Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Sydney, Australia Posts: 239	i will have recordings of some of my songs up soon. here is my latest foray, entitled 'happy days' doesn't matter where i go there's no one i know it's all senseless words in measured indulgences sadness dapples the streets in the glances that fail to meet my eyes and it all conflates to an overwhelming trinket it's raining again raining... inside my head i've been digging a long time i know you must get low for the gold under all that dirt makes me feel to let go it's raining again raining... inside my head [bridge] rainin' repeatx8 and i'm runnin' runninx8 runnin' away, again when my skin is splotched and my hairs are grey and all the dross of life has floated away i'll look back upon this place thinking "those were the happy days" thinking... these are the happy days. once i get the mix/master of the song i'll upload it... i recorded it (with a vintage tape machine!) today.