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Just going to head this one.. If it sucks don't be afraid to tell me

Think a stampeed can stop me? S*** You just amped me to not be/
The most lamest of crackers, and if you add up the factors/ 99%(Percent) of white rappers will never spit on stage, there just actors.. Going through a thugged out faze/ And it's crazy.. I'm rejected by color.. yeah I'm light, but that doesent mean I'm southern/ When I spit my words have the most illest of meanings/ They leave my enemys heated/ and crackheads feining/ It's not my fault.. it's just who I am/ I'm unnoticed like the D in DAMN/ I never thought I would come this close, I was gutted then came back like ghost/ Bobblehead motherf****** think they can steal from me? There aint no game out there, that I havent peeped, and they'll probably be back, and when they do, I'm gonna make there brain go splat!/ It's a fact I run with a pact, we'll just laugh if you try to attack/ Were equipped with deals for explosives/ Were made with steel Incase you didn't notice/ Were ready to kill guns set on focus/ Were to real, test me and I'll show ya/.

Rainfall

You had to post this twice? It's not good enough to be posted once; you can't follow it when it's all jumbled into one sentence. Take the time to press 'enter' after every line.

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will next time thx

mr dave

so first off you claim you're not like all the others then spit out a diatribe like... all the others. your words have the illest of meaning?.....




stampeed is spelled stampede.

faze is not a word. phase is.

feining? isn't a real word either - feigning (faking) doesn't work in that sentence either, but reeling would.

unnoticed like the D in DAMN? uhh... the N is the unnoticed letter in that word.

there is indicative, like a place you go to. their is possessive, like something someone else owns.

running with a pact? you run with a contract?

were means the past version of being. we're means we are.

equipped with deals for explosives? so you have the ability to cause paper cuts?

ready to kill guns set on focus? what?

to is something you do. too is how much of it you do.


you want to claim to be different than the norm then step up and provide something unique as opposed to yet another 'look at how tough me and my boys are' raps. like 99% of all the other wannabes out there. a little less time with the metaphysical c*ck measuring contest and a little more time tackling the grade 3 grammatical issues you're facing and you might be able to put together something decent.

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I'm closing this. One thread discussing the lyrics of the same song is more than enough.