summerwhite

Hey guys, please comment on my song. I'm new and I really need to improve myself.


WRONG SONG

Hey boy, sorry what did you say?
Is it something about baseball?
Or your new six strings?
I was mesmerized and lost in your eyes
And your smile just takes me to cloud nine
So I write a song for you
But why do your eyes seems so empty?

[c/o]
You listen to the words I sing, I try to reach in
But I don’t think you feel it
The things I wanna say
The feelings that I hide
I’m looking into your eyes
You say its great but I don’t feel great
You say its gonna be hit
But that’s not what I mean

Hey boy, I wish I could tell you the truth
It is something inside me
It is something they call love
But now something tells me you don’t feel the same
Cuz I wrote you a song
And your eyes seems so empty

[c/o]

I guess I gave you the wrong song
Maybe it’s the melody
Maybe something with the lyrics
Or maybe it’s the title?
Maybe it’s the bridge
Maybe the verse and chorus won’t fit
Or is it because I sing it?

[c/o]

Cuz I wrote you a song
And your eyes seems so empty
Guess I gave you the wrong song
Because I sing it.