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tanner99 07-23-2009 12:59 AM

Under The Hole
 
You could never guess what was down there under the hole.
I went under and found out myself.

Under the hole is a world that you can’t believe
It’s a world full of evil
A world full of magic
A world full of hate

You could never guess what was down there under the hole.
You could never guess what was down there under the hole.
You could never guess what was down there under the hole.


The fall was long.
The fall was painful.
The fall brought me to an amazing world.

Giant trolls
Dark wizards
Little gnomes
Castles made of bones
Darker then the eyes of the Devil
All down under the hole

The underworld is planning to revolt against us
The underworld is planning to revolt against us
The underworld is planning to revolt against us
The underworld is planning to revolt against us

They have their magic and we have our bullets
They have their magic and we have our bullets

They will win and we will die
It’s about time.

They want to see the Sun
And they want to us to go down

You could never guess what was down there under the hole.
You could never guess what was down there under the hole.
You could never guess what was down there under the hole.


I'm still thinking of adding more stuff. This is a metal-ish song with distortion guitar and bass. Any comments will be appreciated.

Shivs 07-23-2009 12:30 PM

Ahhh...develop it more, I think.

half drag 07-23-2009 12:31 PM

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Originally Posted by tanner99 (Post 708152)
Giant trolls
Dark wizards
Little gnomes
Castles made of bones

I like that bit!

tanner99 07-23-2009 01:32 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Shivs (Post 708302)
Ahhh...develop it more, I think.

yeah i know, but i have kind of a mental block on the song lol

tanner99 07-24-2009 02:45 AM

lol any other opinions/suggestions?

someonecompletelyrandom 07-27-2009 04:41 PM

It's pretty cliche. Would work in a Lightning Bolt song or with a parody metal band like Tenacious D. Interesting concept though.

right-track 07-27-2009 05:16 PM

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Originally Posted by tanner99 (Post 708736)
lol any other opinions/suggestions?

Stop!


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