VeggieLovers Journey into Lyrics and Poetry

VeggieLover · 08-04-2009, 11:43 PM

I'd rather not get bumped onto the 3rd page of oblivion, so here is my place holder!

VEGANGELICA · 08-05-2009, 12:01 AM

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Originally Posted by VeggieLover

I'd rather not get bumped onto the 3rd page of oblivion, so here is my place holder!

Yes...the 3rd page of oblivion...scary place, that. I've been meaning to write more about your poems but as you see am behind, so seeing your VeggieLover thread pop up is a good reminder!

You wrote:

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"Growing as it may" is actually just the way I talk and wasn't meant as a filler, nor was it a forced rhyme, but the fact that it comes off that way needs i need to spend a bit more time in editing. You could look at this line as an indication that the storm grows of its own accord, we as individuals can't control it.

Ahh..I understand now about "may." I suppose part of what made me feel maybe it was being used due to the rhyming more than the meaning is that the feeling of a storm growing seems so ominous that I expect it to grow rather than perhaps grow.

More later!
--Erica

VeggieLover · 08-10-2009, 12:49 PM

Hey everyone, just wrote this song a bit ago, so editing has been minimal at best. Let me know what you think, these are the first lyrics I've posted that were originally intended to be put to music. The style would be...creepy? Heavier sounding guitars and a very heavy base part. Of course, I only sing and play the flute so I'll need actual musicians to write those parts, but that's what I hear in my head

The Dance
Rats and Cats and raucous romance,
Circle around in a hypnotized Dance.
Tripping, falling, calling, bawling;
Know the steps or void the chance
Yes, know the steps or lose your chance

Dimes and fives and a long lonely drive,
Park in a line and proceed to contrive
(All the) chatting, smiling, earning, buying.
Learn the dance or be eaten alive
Yes, learn to dance or be cooked alive

{Chorus}
Twirl, leap -- a Grand Jete
March in time
We're all the same, everyday
So don't step out of the line

Where is it leading?
What goal are we seeing?

(intrumentals)

A smile a grin we're at it again
Twirling in line with our hearts made of tin
Scratching, clawing, our shallow lining
Poke through the sheet to the realm of sin
Oh tear through the sheet to the world of sin.

{Chorus}

A smile a grin, we're dying again.

DiSTANToblivion · 12-01-2009, 05:49 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by VeggieLover

Hey everyone, just wrote this song a bit ago, so editing has been minimal at best. Let me know what you think, these are the first lyrics I've posted that were originally intended to be put to music. The style would be...creepy? Heavier sounding guitars and a very heavy base part. Of course, I only sing and play the flute so I'll need actual musicians to write those parts, but that's what I hear in my head

The Dance
Rats and Cats and raucous romance,
Circle around in a hypnotized Dance.
Tripping, falling, calling, bawling;
Know the steps or void the chance
Yes, know the steps or lose your chance

Dimes and fives and a long lonely drive,
Park in a line and proceed to contrive
(All the) chatting, smiling, earning, buying.
Learn the dance or be eaten alive
Yes, learn to dance or be cooked alive

{Chorus}
Twirl, leap -- a Grand Jete
March in time
We're all the same, everyday
So don't step out of the line

Where is it leading?
What goal are we seeing?

(intrumentals)

A smile a grin we're at it again
Twirling in line with our hearts made of tin
Scratching, clawing, our shallow lining
Poke through the sheet to the realm of sin
Oh tear through the sheet to the world of sin.

{Chorus}

A smile a grin, we're dying again.

I like reading your writing, I really liked Cold on the first page.

I don't know why but I'm getting a very Pain Of Salvation vibe from this one?

(which is a very nice thing)

VeggieLover · 12-01-2009, 04:20 PM

ha, it was weird to see my thread on the first page again... thanks for reading, Cold is my favorite too. Unfortunitely my creativity is being stifled by the amount of time i spend on school work so I haven't had a chance to write at all, very sad. Hopefully I will more now that i'm keeping a journal (again). *sigh*

And somehow Pain of Salvation has managed to escape my notice until now...but I did a quick listen, and yes, the general feeling of their music was roughly what I had planned for "The Dance." Thanks for commenting and adding this band to my "like" list!

DiSTANToblivion · 12-01-2009, 10:48 PM

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Originally Posted by VeggieLover

ha, it was weird to see my thread on the first page again... thanks for reading, Cold is my favorite too. Unfortunitely my creativity is being stifled by the amount of time i spend on school work so I haven't had a chance to write at all, very sad. Hopefully I will more now that i'm keeping a journal (again). *sigh*

And somehow Pain of Salvation has managed to escape my notice until now...but I did a quick listen, and yes, the general feeling of their music was roughly what I had planned for "The Dance." Thanks for commenting and adding this band to my "like" list!

No problem

I've always loved PoS, changing their style constantly. Well I mean they are progressive so it's a given that they do.

'Cold' seriously needs to be made into a song, I'd love to hear it.

VeggieLover · 01-17-2010, 12:06 PM

I just got a ukulele and can finally put music to my lyrics. I'm finding it's also a lot easier to make up lyrics when there is already music as well. I've already put the rainbow one from the very first page to music (kind of a silly kids song type thing) and here is my very first ever love song:

Inbetween Time

Running through the starlight
A pair of alpha wolves
A ballroom in the misty rain
This sweet fantasy keeps my shoulders straight
These wond'rings keep me sane

Chorus
When the distances between us
Are a calandar or two
Let us go down dancing
Betwixt the mists of time
When the distance inbetween us
Is just a calandar
Let us dance, let us take refuge
Inbetween times

Hello, baby, how are you?
It's been a long hard day,
and I've missed you

Is it love lost hold, direction,
Walking a stretched phone line?
How do yo know I love you
When you're oh so far away?
But I do.

Chorus

But the cuffs and chains that bind us
to the city walls so cold,
Responsibility, will keep us occupied
Until your paw in mine I'll hold

Hello baby, how are you?
It's been a long hard day,
And I've missed you
and I love you.
How I've missed you.

Let us go down dancing
Betwixt the mists of time
Let us go, let us go out dancing
Inbetween time.
And i love you, how I love you
Inbetween time
Inbetween time.

It ends up being about 5 minutes long..because it's very slow.

08-04-2009, 11:43 PM	#1 (permalink)
VeggieLover Music?! Lets boogie! Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: CO Posts: 215	I'd rather not get bumped onto the 3rd page of oblivion, so here is my place holder! __________________ "Not remotely! Because iocaine comes from Australia, as everyone knows. And Australia is entirely peopled with criminals. And criminals are used to having people not trust them as you are not trusted by me, so I can clearly not choose the wine in front of you."

08-10-2009, 12:49 PM	#3 (permalink)
VeggieLover Music?! Lets boogie! Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: CO Posts: 215	The Dance Hey everyone, just wrote this song a bit ago, so editing has been minimal at best. Let me know what you think, these are the first lyrics I've posted that were originally intended to be put to music. The style would be...creepy? Heavier sounding guitars and a very heavy base part. Of course, I only sing and play the flute so I'll need actual musicians to write those parts, but that's what I hear in my head The Dance Rats and Cats and raucous romance, Circle around in a hypnotized Dance. Tripping, falling, calling, bawling; Know the steps or void the chance Yes, know the steps or lose your chance Dimes and fives and a long lonely drive, Park in a line and proceed to contrive (All the) chatting, smiling, earning, buying. Learn the dance or be eaten alive Yes, learn to dance or be cooked alive {Chorus} Twirl, leap -- a Grand Jete March in time We're all the same, everyday So don't step out of the line Where is it leading? What goal are we seeing? (intrumentals) A smile a grin we're at it again Twirling in line with our hearts made of tin Scratching, clawing, our shallow lining Poke through the sheet to the realm of sin Oh tear through the sheet to the world of sin. {Chorus} A smile a grin, we're dying again. __________________ "Not remotely! Because iocaine comes from Australia, as everyone knows. And Australia is entirely peopled with criminals. And criminals are used to having people not trust them as you are not trusted by me, so I can clearly not choose the wine in front of you."

12-01-2009, 04:20 PM	#5 (permalink)
VeggieLover Music?! Lets boogie! Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: CO Posts: 215	ha, it was weird to see my thread on the first page again... thanks for reading, Cold is my favorite too. Unfortunitely my creativity is being stifled by the amount of time i spend on school work so I haven't had a chance to write at all, very sad. Hopefully I will more now that i'm keeping a journal (again). sigh And somehow Pain of Salvation has managed to escape my notice until now...but I did a quick listen, and yes, the general feeling of their music was roughly what I had planned for "The Dance." Thanks for commenting and adding this band to my "like" list! __________________ "Not remotely! Because iocaine comes from Australia, as everyone knows. And Australia is entirely peopled with criminals. And criminals are used to having people not trust them as you are not trusted by me, so I can clearly not choose the wine in front of you."

01-17-2010, 12:06 PM	#7 (permalink)
VeggieLover Music?! Lets boogie! Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: CO Posts: 215	New song!!!!!!! I just got a ukulele and can finally put music to my lyrics. I'm finding it's also a lot easier to make up lyrics when there is already music as well. I've already put the rainbow one from the very first page to music (kind of a silly kids song type thing) and here is my very first ever love song: Inbetween Time Running through the starlight A pair of alpha wolves A ballroom in the misty rain This sweet fantasy keeps my shoulders straight These wond'rings keep me sane Chorus When the distances between us Are a calandar or two Let us go down dancing Betwixt the mists of time When the distance inbetween us Is just a calandar Let us dance, let us take refuge Inbetween times Hello, baby, how are you? It's been a long hard day, and I've missed you Is it love lost hold, direction, Walking a stretched phone line? How do yo know I love you When you're oh so far away? But I do. Chorus But the cuffs and chains that bind us to the city walls so cold, Responsibility, will keep us occupied Until your paw in mine I'll hold Hello baby, how are you? It's been a long hard day, And I've missed you and I love you. How I've missed you. Let us go down dancing Betwixt the mists of time Let us go, let us go out dancing Inbetween time. And i love you, how I love you Inbetween time Inbetween time. It ends up being about 5 minutes long..because it's very slow. __________________ "Not remotely! Because iocaine comes from Australia, as everyone knows. And Australia is entirely peopled with criminals. And criminals are used to having people not trust them as you are not trusted by me, so I can clearly not choose the wine in front of you."