sogriter1300

Its not finished but let me know what u think,it is inspired in one band and one person!

Its now or never
never too late,
dont say goodbyes,
till the end of our days
even the distance make us fall apart,
memories in our hearts,
never regret just think it twice,
everything i ever needed,
everything i could ask for
next to me always together,
holding u in my arms(aam i dreaming?)
moon never too beautiful,
never thought for one second,
never stood in my mind,im out
take my hand,trust me,
u and me forever, love is our fuel
ru run with me, we can go so far
everyday and nght together, to the very end
nothing to worry about, it would never be dark,(i swear)

post a comment please i have to know what u think!!!

ramms+ein

If it's truthful commenting that you want and I honestly don't mean to offend you. But the song is rubbish, it makes sense and it's well written (has a storyline) but it doesn't ryhme and try making a key phrase to the song like-"memories in our hearts"- try and make the song revolve around those particular words.

sogriter1300

ok well im starting,thanx for commenting,ill try to fix a little and post it later,
anyways thanx

Ricochet~kun

it would be a good feel good inc. style song.

but any other style, it needs structure

(like im one to tell other people how to write thier songs)
*cough*snow dump*cough*

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sogriter1300

i really need to know! thanks for ur time!<3