Foo Fighting's Collection
 

Take a look outside the window,
At the horizon.
Can you see the light,
Or are you blinded,

By the glare of the television,
Technology's glow.
Can you stop its deathly mission,
Or is this the final blow?

It's time to stop the crap,
Or take the wrath.
Just get a life,
And you'll be surprised

Take a step outside
You'd be surprised
At what lies
With the bees and flies
Take a deep breath
And take a deep dive
Into the real world
And just live your life

You'd be surprised
At what lies outside your oak front door
You'd be surprised
By so much more
Than just computer games
'Coz theres so heaps heaps more
Outside.

Theres strangers, mangers,
flus that are contagious.
Teachers, preachers,
Freshwater Leeches.
Cats and dogs,
Man-eating bogs.
Sports, weather,
man leather.
Reading glasses,
big fat...
uhh... Donkeys!

So take a step outside
You'd be surprised
At what lies
With the bees and flies
Take a deep breath
And take a deep dive
Into the real world
And just live your life

You'd be pretty damn surprised.

'Rainy Saturday'
 

I could feel it from the start,
It was irrepressable.
First feel of love,
Unbelievable.

You're the one:
Perfect in every way.
The one I met
On Rainy Saturday.

You warmed me up
And took me in
You made me laugh
And made me grin.
You're the sunshine in my day.
For every Rainy Saturday.

You gave me shelter
Before we even spoke.
Through the pouring rain,
You gave me your coat.

You save me from more than just wet hair
HA!
You took me from my cold despair.
I was saved...
on Rainy Saturday.

You warmed me up
And took me in
You made me laugh
And made me grin.
You're the sunshine in my day.
For every Rainy Saturday.

You're the sunshine in my day,
For every single Rainy Saturday.

- BESIDES THIS SONG, COZ I LIKE IT-

Comments?

Comments?

Pages???
 

Have you got a page you want people to see on Music Banter?
Well right the name of the page down... and people might go look at it!

negatory

Start of 'New Craze'
 

I hear the radio blaring,
It's driving me insane.
With all that constant swearing,
Those songs are so ***.

So we've gotta make our voice heard.
And have my word.
Plug in the cord.

It's a voice of a new age
Rip it up and turn the page
You're a part of a new craze
Music's in a new phase.

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I just want to know if it's crap or not. Should I keep it going, improve it, or scrap the song?

'Video Killed the Radio Star' Modernised
 

THIS SONG IS TO THE BEAT OF THE SONG: VIDEO KILLED THE RADIO STAR by The Buggles

T.V. killed the fat loser.
Maccas killed America.
The Simpsons killed the 'Ha Ha Ha Ha'.
Government screwed the people over.

Video smashed the radio up.
Music T.V. really f###ed up.
Camera stuffed up all the good shots.
AND
Video killed the radio star.
Video killed the radio star.
Video killed the radio star.
Video killed the radio star.

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Thoughts? I think I breached the Copyright :D

'Hayley'
 

I had a friend
When I was a little girl.
To me
She meant the world.

I saw her everyday
And everyday I laughed.
She stuck by me
Whenever I was stuck.
Always, she gave me a hand.
That hand pulled me back to land.
If I couldn't find my way
She'd come over and say
'Hey Hey'

Hayley
I remember you
Now I see
How much you meant to me
How much you mean now
I need to see you
Somehow.

Someday
I'll find a way
We'll see each other again
And when we do
I will say
Hey Hey.

Hayley.

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This song is about my friend from Grade 2, Hayley M. I hadn't talked to her for years, until I found her last year, in Year 7.
I found her on MySpace, and I was so surprised. Keep it in mind that when I wrote this song, it was before I found Hayley on MySpace.

All your threads have been merged into one.

Please read the rules Here about posting your work in this forum.

yeah I didnt mean for all my songs to go like this.
I made them all seperated and then they all merged to one...
im as confused as you are!

Because that's how things are posted in this forum.

There's a thread at the top of the page saying ' READ THIS THREAD BEFORE YOU POST ANYTHING HERE'

I also gave you the link to it earlier in this thread if you are in any doubt.

Riverbank



Sitting on the riverbank
Watching the sun
Only just a year ago
I found the one

The hot summer of last year
My feet in the sand
Frying in the burning light
You gave me your hand

We moved under the big tree
And into the shade
Talking, laughing, then I asked
To tell me your name

You hesitated shortly
Then opened your mouth
It moved like it was talking
But there was no sound

"Why so mysterious"
I asked quizzically
But you'd already run off
Away from me

A lonely month followed
I was so bored
But when Autumn came
To the riverside I returned

That day I found you under
The big shady tree
That a month ago had kept the
Sun away from me

You seemed different
Quiet, sad, and scared
When you sat down with me
You stopped acting so weird

We talked, laughed, and then I said
"I still don't know your name"
You didn't answer no
But you did something great

Leaning over on the leaves
You stared in to my eyes
A smile spread across your face
I forgot all your lies

You lips brushed mine, tenderly, lovingly
My eyes closed in delight
I'd never ever felt so good
I'd never felt so bright

We sat under the big old tree
Until the sun set
A cloud rolled over the sky above
And suddenly we were wet

We ran home as fast as we could
I welcomed him through the door
But he refused suddenly
And ran home with no more

Until that day a year ago
I've not seen you once
We only met each other twice
But it felt like months and months

So now I sit at the riverbank
The blaring sun up high
I think of the unnamed man
And heave a great big sigh

One more time I'd like to see
The one perfect man
But the riverbank lay lone and bare
Except for the land

I sit there with my memories
I wish you were there
A sound crackles in my ear
I turn around in fear

A figure rises through the trees
A brilliant thought takes over me
I shift happily in the sand
As you hold out your hand

You take me to the shady tree
You put your arms around me
Your tender lips brush mine
I feel so damn fine

A smile grows upon your face
Your mouth opens to say
"My name is still unkown to you
It will still be a mystery too"

"So what about a nickname?
You can pick it- it's a game"
I think a sec and then I whisper
"Hi, my best friend ever, River!"


- I wrote the first 3 or 4 lines on a piece of paper, but the rest was written while on Banter- so it gets a bit crap and corny, including the last line. Sorry-

You shouldn't have posted it twice, I didn't realize you had a collection already.

One Last Glance

It's been one thousand years
Since I last saw your face.
I've shed one thousand tears
And I've shed my grace.

Five hundred years more
I would stand.
If it could mean
Just one more glance.

The lines that I didn't quote sound too clichè for me to really be affected by it.

I like those four lines I quoted, though.

Thanks for the feedback AwwSugar- keep it up.

Keep up the feedback? xD

Yep :D - I see you're commenting on a lot of peoples songs. Youre doing a good job :D

Rhyme
 

Red sails in the sunrise
And everybody opens up their eyes.


-Don't even bother with this rhyme. I got it from a news headline about the mist that covered Sydney Harbour in Australia last week. It's just here for the sake of it-

Schizophrenia
 

Look into the water,
tell me what you see.
A second stranger
staring back at me?

You can see the fright
reflected in my eyes.
'Cuz what you see
so confuses me.

Confusion takes you over,
and it flows to my brain.
And we're thinking us over
But we two are the same.

Schizophrenia
we suffer.

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Simple song, as usual, and no ending. :banghead:

The Greatest Game in History!
 

Sherrin on a football boot
Great men in white shorts
The grandest game is fought
By the tackle, hand and foot.

The game has begun
The massive crowd screams
Players, by any means
Will compete til they've won.

The ruck' gets the ball
And kicks it to 'fifty
Opponents look shifty as the
Forward marks and falls

The fans shouts encourages
And the others all 'Boo!'
Forward checks his shoe
Then forwards he surges

He holds the ball downwards
Left arm goes up
Pulls his right foot backwards
And looks straight up.

Staring through goalposts
His right arm drops
Right leg flies forwards
And so does the ball.

Sherrin soars high and fast
Straight through the posts




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Aussie Rules Footy. Best game in the world

Hi FooFighting,

I decided to comment on this poem because it appeals to me for three reasons:

(1) I don't often read poems about Australian football!
(2) I didn't know what a sherrin was, and so had to look it up and now know it is a brand of football used in Australian football.
(3) I love rhyming poetry and I like the way you have stayed quite closely to a 4-line stanza in which the 1st and 4th lines rhyme.

When I see your poem start with quite fixed rhyme scheme (such as abba), I tend to want to see that maintained throughout the poem...unless the relaxation of the rhyme scheme is to represent the frenzied chaos and the excitement of the game taking over the crowd and players! I have never watched an Australian football match, so it was fun to read something written about it by a fan/player.

--Erica

I think some of your work is a little too lengthy...

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