Llama's Licentious Lollogies

Seltzer · 09-04-2009, 10:38 AM

How so? Don't you like the title?

Rainfall · 09-05-2009, 01:10 AM

Title of what?

Pehaps I should extrapolate. For example, one starts every other line with 'your love,' and another starts every other line with 'my love.' It gets a little old, but I know some of the best songs are like this, and I do like 'Her Eyes,' which is like that. It's just hit and miss I guess.

Lamar Cole · 09-06-2009, 01:49 PM

This love runs on emotion.
This love is fueled by devotion.
This love floats on feelings.
Higher than a cathedral ceiling.

This love soars on the breeze of monogamy.
Two hearts in perfect harmony.
This love is you.
This love is me.
Together, forever through eternity.

VeggieLover · 09-06-2009, 01:57 PM

i can't tell why i like your poetry exactly (well, some of it) because it is definitely not my usual style. hmmm. Still too ashamed of myself to offer further critique, but ill let you know.

Also, you need to post all your work in one thread, to save space.

Nicktarist · 09-06-2009, 02:48 PM

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i can't tell why i like your poetry exactly (well, some of it) because it is definitely not my usual style. hmmm. Still too ashamed of myself to offer further critique, but ill let you know.

Maybe because he's so persistant about it that it convinces you his topic is genuine. Don't be ashamed about it, public opinion is never really the definition of quality.

peace,
-nick

Rainfall · 09-06-2009, 03:01 PM

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Still too ashamed of myself to offer further critique, but ill let you know.

How long must this despondancy go on? Can't you be like everyone else: cut yourself, and move on?

VeggieLover · 09-06-2009, 10:48 PM

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How long must this despondancy go on? Can't you be like everyone else: cut yourself, and move on?

ha. been there done that, ended up in therapy. We'll let it run its course.

Rainfall · 09-06-2009, 11:36 PM

oh

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sorry for bringing it up, didn't mean anything by it.

VeggieLover · 09-07-2009, 12:07 AM

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Originally Posted by Rainfall

oh

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sorry for bringing it up, didn't mean anything by it.

No worries.

that was a long while ago (in teenage time) and I am generally a very happy person. Just going through a little...idk wut it is, but it will run its course and i'll be back to my poetry critiquing self in no time. Still waiting for your poem Rainfall.

again, no worries.

Oh, and sorry this convo is in ur thread Lamar Cole....but really, the thread shouldn't be here anyway, it should be in with ur other stuff.

Rainfall · 09-07-2009, 12:37 AM

Yes, appologies for getting off-track, as it is my fault. I don't even know if you read what anyone is writing to you though... a post or two on some of the critism would be nice and engaging, but make sure you do it on your LLL thread.

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Still waiting for your poem Rainfall.

*twitch twitch O.o* Can't handle the pressure... !
lol, I got a few things worked out, but nuthin that'll make you shit yourself...

... yet.

09-04-2009, 10:38 AM	#31 (permalink)
Seltzer Fish in the percolator! Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Hobbit Land NZ Posts: 2,870	How so? Don't you like the title? __________________ In the Court of King Crimson \| Last.fm \| RYM

09-05-2009, 01:10 AM	#32 (permalink)
Rainfall Not your best friend. Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Portland, Oregon Posts: 67	Title of what? Pehaps I should extrapolate. For example, one starts every other line with 'your love,' and another starts every other line with 'my love.' It gets a little old, but I know some of the best songs are like this, and I do like 'Her Eyes,' which is like that. It's just hit and miss I guess. __________________ Rule #7 – Trust only when trusted.

09-06-2009, 01:49 PM	#33 (permalink)
Lamar Cole Groupie Join Date: May 2009 Posts: 15	This Love This love runs on emotion. This love is fueled by devotion. This love floats on feelings. Higher than a cathedral ceiling. This love soars on the breeze of monogamy. Two hearts in perfect harmony. This love is you. This love is me. Together, forever through eternity.

09-06-2009, 01:57 PM	#34 (permalink)
VeggieLover Music?! Lets boogie! Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: CO Posts: 215	i can't tell why i like your poetry exactly (well, some of it) because it is definitely not my usual style. hmmm. Still too ashamed of myself to offer further critique, but ill let you know. Also, you need to post all your work in one thread, to save space. __________________ "Not remotely! Because iocaine comes from Australia, as everyone knows. And Australia is entirely peopled with criminals. And criminals are used to having people not trust them as you are not trusted by me, so I can clearly not choose the wine in front of you."

09-06-2009, 11:36 PM	#38 (permalink)
Rainfall Not your best friend. Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Portland, Oregon Posts: 67	oh ... sorry for bringing it up, didn't mean anything by it. __________________ Rule #7 – Trust only when trusted.