Eliratner's Songwriting Journal (lyrics)

eliratner · 04-29-2009, 11:21 AM

Lyrics:

crash_override · 04-29-2009, 11:23 AM

Well it's a start. It doesn't really say much, but sometimes simple is better. Maybe add some more body to it. It seems sort of short.

Elvon · 05-12-2009, 10:21 AM

Yeah he's right, it seems short ^^ you should add.

Nation · 05-12-2009, 10:31 AM

Depends upon what the music is like.
That song could either be ridiculously good, or horrible.
A little lyrical revision might be a good idea.
Make it a bit more heartfelt, or even more believable.
If your music is good, though, you can get away with it.

Guybrush · 05-16-2009, 07:20 AM

Eliratner, your threads have been merged into one.

Read : http://www.musicbanter.com/song-writ...e-posting.html

Send me or another mod a PM with a link to this thread if you want us to change the name.

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Nation Groupie Join Date: Mar 2009 Posts: 40	Depends upon what the music is like. That song could either be ridiculously good, or horrible. A little lyrical revision might be a good idea. Make it a bit more heartfelt, or even more believable. If your music is good, though, you can get away with it. __________________ My music channel Nation's the name, Music is my game.

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crash_override Seemingly Silenced Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Everett, WA Posts: 2,312	Well it's a start. It doesn't really say much, but sometimes simple is better. Maybe add some more body to it. It seems sort of short.

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Elvon Music Addict Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Uppsala/Sweden Posts: 62	Yeah he's right, it seems short ^^ you should add.