Eliratner's Songwriting Journal
 

Lyrics:

Well it's a start. It doesn't really say much, but sometimes simple is better. Maybe add some more body to it. It seems sort of short.

Yeah he's right, it seems short ^^ you should add.

Depends upon what the music is like.
That song could either be ridiculously good, or horrible.
A little lyrical revision might be a good idea.
Make it a bit more heartfelt, or even more believable.
If your music is good, though, you can get away with it.

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