Stone Birds' Songwriting Journal (bass, song, guitar, Bass drum)

Stone Birds · 04-18-2009, 11:58 AM

I need a name for this, please help.

Silk covered lands
We cross our hands
The shadowy figure
Standing before us
Yellow sun turns red

Ill fortuned folks
Forced to starve
There is a light
On the street
It asks for a chair

Treading on
Going forth
To find a crossroads
Where to go now
Where are your leaders now

Red, the ground is red
Go forth and die to live
Thorns upon thy face
Will not erase
Mellow out
Please don’t shout

Treading on
Going forth
To find a crossroads
Where to go now
Where are your leaders now

P.s. i didn't write the second verse, so if sounds stupid don't blame me.

Stone Birds · 04-18-2009, 02:34 PM

My Latest Song it has a very slow-tempo, and a bass drum. no guitar yet though. also i need to rename it so if you guys can help go ahead.

John, the hero
he walks alone

Please help me
Please save me

I will forget your name
And you will walk alone again

John walks for the poor
John walks for the rich
John walks for the young
John walks for the old
John walks not for himself

You aren't looking for fame
You haven't a dollar to your name
but still you walk for me

Naked · 04-18-2009, 11:30 PM

Well, a recurring theme is colors...
So maybe go with Tinted Red
or something of the sort.

tymygy · 04-19-2009, 12:21 AM

treading on.

the ground is stained with red.

idk :/

darkcornerinthecloset · 04-19-2009, 08:01 PM

what youre getting at is not clear to me. . .be it war or something else. a discription of the color of the whatever-it-is might be a functional title. but something that would apply only to the subject, or at least strongly hint. i agree with maybe "tinted red"

daysleeper1985 · 04-20-2009, 02:23 PM

Hmmm... not sure if it fits in with where you're coming from but i'm coming around to a name somewhere along the lines of 'moving still', i've always been a fan of paradoxical cryptic song names and for some reason i feel that it fits this one pretty well...not sure if i've been of any assistance but its a thought

Stone Birds · 04-21-2009, 04:05 PM

You got lost in the atmosphere
i fell down in a hole
mystery speaks in tounges
(Need something to rhyme with hole)

Flip the jupiter signs
forget all the bad times
fly on to neptune
cause baby i'll see ya soon

It's All i got so far i need a lot of help. the song is supposed to have a pop-blues sorta feel to it

yvi_poison · 04-21-2009, 04:29 PM

(Need something to rhyme with hole) -- > Soul,whole, stole?

Stone Birds · 04-21-2009, 04:50 PM

You got lost in the atmosphere
i fell down in a hole
mystery speaks in tounges
But my heart you stole

Flip the jupiter signs
forget all the bad times
fly on to neptune
cause baby i'll see ya soon

Does that line work?

yvi_poison · 04-21-2009, 05:06 PM

yes nice

04-18-2009, 11:58 AM	#1 (permalink)
Stone Birds myspace.com/stonebirdies Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Conor Oberst Was/is Here Posts: 1,401	Stone Birds' Songwriting Journal I need a name for this, please help. Silk covered lands We cross our hands The shadowy figure Standing before us Yellow sun turns red Ill fortuned folks Forced to starve There is a light On the street It asks for a chair Treading on Going forth To find a crossroads Where to go now Where are your leaders now Red, the ground is red Go forth and die to live Thorns upon thy face Will not erase Mellow out Please don’t shout Treading on Going forth To find a crossroads Where to go now Where are your leaders now P.s. i didn't write the second verse, so if sounds stupid don't blame me.

04-18-2009, 02:34 PM	#2 (permalink)
Stone Birds myspace.com/stonebirdies Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Conor Oberst Was/is Here Posts: 1,401	John Walks My Latest Song it has a very slow-tempo, and a bass drum. no guitar yet though. also i need to rename it so if you guys can help go ahead. John, the hero he walks alone Please help me Please save me I will forget your name And you will walk alone again John walks for the poor John walks for the rich John walks for the young John walks for the old John walks not for himself You aren't looking for fame You haven't a dollar to your name but still you walk for me

04-19-2009, 08:01 PM	#5 (permalink)
darkcornerinthecloset Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Rochester, NY Posts: 160	what youre getting at is not clear to me. . .be it war or something else. a discription of the color of the whatever-it-is might be a functional title. but something that would apply only to the subject, or at least strongly hint. i agree with maybe "tinted red" __________________ If you board the wrong train, it is no use running along the corridor in the other direction.

04-21-2009, 04:05 PM	#7 (permalink)
Stone Birds myspace.com/stonebirdies Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Conor Oberst Was/is Here Posts: 1,401	Universal Breaker You got lost in the atmosphere i fell down in a hole mystery speaks in tounges (Need something to rhyme with hole) Flip the jupiter signs forget all the bad times fly on to neptune cause baby i'll see ya soon It's All i got so far i need a lot of help. the song is supposed to have a pop-blues sorta feel to it

04-21-2009, 04:50 PM	#9 (permalink)
Stone Birds myspace.com/stonebirdies Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Conor Oberst Was/is Here Posts: 1,401	You got lost in the atmosphere i fell down in a hole mystery speaks in tounges But my heart you stole Flip the jupiter signs forget all the bad times fly on to neptune cause baby i'll see ya soon Does that line work?

04-18-2009, 11:30 PM	#3 (permalink)
Naked Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Posts: 48	Well, a recurring theme is colors... So maybe go with Tinted Red or something of the sort.

04-19-2009, 12:21 AM	#4 (permalink)
tymygy Groupie Join Date: Apr 2009 Posts: 13	treading on. the ground is stained with red. idk :/

04-20-2009, 02:23 PM	#6 (permalink)
daysleeper1985 Groupie Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: remember that place next to the floating antelopes? not there. Posts: 20	Hmmm... not sure if it fits in with where you're coming from but i'm coming around to a name somewhere along the lines of 'moving still', i've always been a fan of paradoxical cryptic song names and for some reason i feel that it fits this one pretty well...not sure if i've been of any assistance but its a thought

04-21-2009, 04:29 PM	#8 (permalink)
yvi_poison Groupie Join Date: Apr 2009 Posts: 21	(Need something to rhyme with hole) -- > Soul,whole, stole?

04-21-2009, 05:06 PM	#10 (permalink)
yvi_poison Groupie Join Date: Apr 2009 Posts: 21	yes nice