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06-12-2009, 03:26 PM | #71 (permalink) |
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I'm bumping this.
this next song i wrote very randomly for you all You and me are so perfectly aligned with everything cause we sing in harmony that's just one verse but i'm hoping to build it more (genre: Alt. Pop) |
06-19-2009, 12:26 PM | #72 (permalink) |
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Ruhe
There's a moon in the sky
and i feel alive cause i survived i survived Comets come crashin smashin evry'thing around me. i am a soldier in a war i am a child slammed to the floor i am a hero but not to the core could we fight a battle in the sky or in another sky made up of broken stars i am a soldier in a war i am a child slammed to the floor i am a hero but not to the core The sun slowly flys away leaving us in the dark you found me choking on jupiter's dust a metaphorical object a rhetorical question from your friend i am a soldier in a war i am a child slammed to the floor i am a hero but not to the core atlest not anymore |
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I like the strong visual images of nature that you include in this song, which I interpret as describing the road of life we all take and the difficulties/sadness faced while traveling it. For example, you start with a startling yet appealing image: "There's a river by my bed." This beautiful impossibility...unless you happen to be in a tent outside! ...catches my attention right at the beginning of the song. Then, you explain that you have lost this joy and appreciation you once had in living. The loss of this joy seems much more real since you first describe what the joy feels like (using the river/sun). If you had simply described the loss of joy first (without describing the beauty of what was lost), then the loss would seem less painful. I also am touched by the image you create when you write, "Sleep with petals in the cradle." I feel this line succinctly shows the tenderness we have toward our children, or the children we once were, and, when combined with the following line, "And watch the sun go down," describes how quickly life passes (in my interpretation). Life is so fleeting that it can be summarized in two short lines: Quote:
When you write that everyone has walked the road before you, finding a splotch of color, or aspects of life that are profoundly beautiful and meaningful, those lines acknowledge the human condition: many others have enjoyed life, finding beauty in it as much as you do or can now. This section of the song, as I see it, widens the focus of the poem outward away from the speaker toward other people, emphasizing the connection you have to them, and probably sympathy for them, because they also lived...and then died, too, as we must all. I like the shift of focus away from self (not that self isn't important) to others (in addition to self), because I think feeling that connection to other people often helps people heal from hurts inflicted by life. For example, I find it comforting to know others have walked life's road as we do now. Since I know your songs, from what you have said, often revolve around healing, I felt that this portion of this particular song was important because I see it as part of the healing effort: by acknowledging the loss (of life or of joy) this is a way to accept/heal and continue on that hard, grey road. The song also makes me sorry/sad that life (for the speaker of the poem...and I am assuming you are also the speaker of the poem, describing self-experiences rather than experiences of someone else) sometimes feels like a heartless and long, grey, road. One segment of the song that is not clear to me is the following: Quote:
To summarize, the many visual images you use carry me through the song from beginning to end, with the repetition of "petals in the cradle" creating a somber feeling of loss, of the ephemeral, that I feel suits the topic (as I understand it) very well. The repetition of the two lines, "Sleep with petals in the cradle and watch the sun go down" throughout the poem could be interpreted as showing that person after person after person has experienced this brief life and then death. The repetition of these two lines makes me feel as if the song encompasses the lives of many individual people within it. --Erica |
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06-20-2009, 10:38 AM | #74 (permalink) |
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typo, i'm i'm fixing it.
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07-05-2009, 02:47 AM | #75 (permalink) |
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Room 214 / Seven Pennies
"Room 214" Here i am again alone in room two-fourteen just waiting so long, now, so long, forever A simple bed to lay may troubles down a coffee maker to awake me every morning. Walk outside into the light embrace every stranger love every neighbor so long, now, so long, forever a big night, tonight some sort of party the music explodes... Here i am again alone in room two-fourteen just waiting so long, now, so long, forever if you're wondering how this is supposed to flow or make sense or whatever. think of bon iver because that's the kinda song this is. ________________________________________ "Seven Pennies" this is currently just a chorus but it bases the song.
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I like the way you use the theme of family in these lyrics (mother, father, brother, sister, grandpa, grandma) to tie the song together from beginning to end. The "Grandpa gun" is chilling and more so because it is combined with the mentioning of family members, childhood experiences, and nature (sky, sea, flowers, etc.), all of which are so much a part of life. Also, the plea for help that runs throughout the lyrics and the feeling of the need for forgiveness combine to make the song sound like the description of someone wrestling with strong feelings that are welling up into thoughts of suicide ("Grandpa gun, please find me"). Am I interpreting the lyrics as you intended? --Erica |
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07-07-2009, 03:39 AM | #78 (permalink) |
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mostly. i'm usually not completely sure myself until someone points it out to me.
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07-09-2009, 04:37 PM | #79 (permalink) |
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A Nice pop/dance remix i made. i amplified the strings and beat, and put weird delays on choruses on the synth, and whole lotta other things, hope someone likes it:
"Shine 4U" (Stone Birds Remix) if anyone wants a download of this i'll be posting the download on many different sites (including this one) on July 22nd |
07-11-2009, 01:01 PM | #80 (permalink) |
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If I Fell Into Black Water EP
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Artist/Band: Stone Birds Album title: If I Fell Into Black Water EP Genre: Folk / Neofolk / Lofi Tracks: 1. If I Fell Into Black Water 6:32 (new version) 2. M.O.N.D.A.Y. (Instrumental) 3:19 3. Sour Candy 2:34 4. Ruhe 4:36 EP Artwork: Insert: http://www.lulu.com/items/volume_65/...6205_cover.jpg Traycard: http://www.lulu.com/items/volume_65/...5_traycard.jpg Disc (Not in disc image format): http://www.lulu.com/items/volume_65/...76205_disc.jpg
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