Stone Birds' Songwriting Journal

Stone Birds · 05-21-2009, 12:38 PM

Rest now
Its safe now
Let the ghosts sing

His holy name
Your unholy fame
But its alright, its alright
It’s okay

Inspiration isn’t scheduled
Isn’t planned it just comes
Like the ghosts
So respectful

Grow your Ghost
Lift your spirit
Feel better, Feel Better
Find an angel
Listen, listen for whispers
Feel better, Feel Better

Rest now
Its safe now
Let the ghosts sing

A cross so simple
A loss so bad
But, its alright, its alright
Feel better, Feel Better
It’s okay

Grow your Ghost
Heal your soul
Feel better, Feel Better
Sing, sing to god
Pray, pray for the ghosts
Feel better, Feel Better

Rest now
Its safe now

To make you understand this song more i tried to find some songs it has similar sound to:
Thrice - Lost Continent
Keane - A Bad Dream
Bon Iver - Blood Bank
Umm... i'll think of some more

Nicktarist · 05-22-2009, 11:39 PM

Eh, the metaphor is still what's bothering me. It's rather wobbly in terms of meaning. I just kinda hear this 'feel good- God's Holy Ghost is here' type of thing that I hear from all the rich people at my church who are always 'slain in the spirit'.

This is not to be harsh, but you should recognize that the topic you are singing on has to contain insight-not restate or redo what everyone else has done (whether it was a song or not).

Your stuff has been great, in general, but you really need to sit down and think about what your saying in this song here before you consider it even nearly finished.

Stone Birds · 05-23-2009, 03:33 PM

I'm not a christian so that's Not really it. if it was the title would be something more worshipy. its called "Grow Your Ghost" i thought that was straight forward enough

Nicktarist · 05-23-2009, 09:34 PM

than don't force it.

If you don't feel compelled to write the song than don't. Songwriting is about saying what you have or need to say--not what people want you to say.

Stone Birds · 05-24-2009, 09:02 AM

i never said i was doing what people wanted me to.

Nicktarist · 05-24-2009, 12:42 PM

so? what's your motivation?

Stone Birds · 05-24-2009, 10:26 PM

Healing growing (spiritually) that's as simple as i can make it but i could probably go into more detail
i'm agnostic i'm not sure if that helps

Nicktarist · 05-24-2009, 11:32 PM

Quote:

Healing growing (spiritually) that's as simple as i can make it but i could probably go into more detail

That's good enough for me. Time to get back to your writing though now.

btw, wanna see something insane? It may inspire you

It's not a photoshop

peace,
-nick

Stone Birds · 05-25-2009, 10:25 AM

Ha, that's amazing, but the sound it gives off has to be crappy

Nicktarist · 05-25-2009, 10:38 AM

ya, probably--it's a sculpture by a japanese artist who likes taking mass produced goods and 'extremefying' them in some form or another. I'm pretty sure he's also responsible for the largest pair of underwear in the world book of records (guiness)

05-21-2009, 12:38 PM	#41 (permalink)
Stone Birds myspace.com/stonebirdies Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Conor Oberst Was/is Here Posts: 1,401	Grow Your Ghost Rest now Its safe now Let the ghosts sing His holy name Your unholy fame But its alright, its alright It’s okay Inspiration isn’t scheduled Isn’t planned it just comes Like the ghosts So respectful Grow your Ghost Lift your spirit Feel better, Feel Better Find an angel Listen, listen for whispers Feel better, Feel Better Rest now Its safe now Let the ghosts sing A cross so simple A loss so bad But, its alright, its alright Feel better, Feel Better It’s okay Grow your Ghost Heal your soul Feel better, Feel Better Sing, sing to god Pray, pray for the ghosts Feel better, Feel Better Rest now Its safe now To make you understand this song more i tried to find some songs it has similar sound to: Thrice - Lost Continent Keane - A Bad Dream Bon Iver - Blood Bank Umm... i'll think of some more __________________ Silk & Tree Records //\\//\\/\\/\/\/\\\\\\\\///\/\/\/\/\\////\/\\\\\///\V //\\//\\/\\/\/\/\\\\\\\\///\/\/\/\/\\////\/\\\\\///\V soundcloud.com/stonebirds [Link removed by mod, no advertising] ... Damn those mods are always gettin ya :) Last edited by Stone Birds; 11-20-2009 at 05:15 PM.

05-23-2009, 03:33 PM	#43 (permalink)
Stone Birds myspace.com/stonebirdies Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Conor Oberst Was/is Here Posts: 1,401	I'm not a christian so that's Not really it. if it was the title would be something more worshipy. its called "Grow Your Ghost" i thought that was straight forward enough __________________ Silk & Tree Records //\\//\\/\\/\/\/\\\\\\\\///\/\/\/\/\\////\/\\\\\///\V //\\//\\/\\/\/\/\\\\\\\\///\/\/\/\/\\////\/\\\\\///\V soundcloud.com/stonebirds [Link removed by mod, no advertising] ... Damn those mods are always gettin ya :) Last edited by Stone Birds; 05-23-2009 at 06:27 PM.

05-24-2009, 09:02 AM	#45 (permalink)
Stone Birds myspace.com/stonebirdies Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Conor Oberst Was/is Here Posts: 1,401	i never said i was doing what people wanted me to. __________________ Silk & Tree Records //\\//\\/\\/\/\/\\\\\\\\///\/\/\/\/\\////\/\\\\\///\V //\\//\\/\\/\/\/\\\\\\\\///\/\/\/\/\\////\/\\\\\///\V soundcloud.com/stonebirds [Link removed by mod, no advertising] ... Damn those mods are always gettin ya :)

05-24-2009, 10:26 PM	#47 (permalink)
Stone Birds myspace.com/stonebirdies Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Conor Oberst Was/is Here Posts: 1,401	Healing growing (spiritually) that's as simple as i can make it but i could probably go into more detail i'm agnostic i'm not sure if that helps __________________ Silk & Tree Records //\\//\\/\\/\/\/\\\\\\\\///\/\/\/\/\\////\/\\\\\///\V //\\//\\/\\/\/\/\\\\\\\\///\/\/\/\/\\////\/\\\\\///\V soundcloud.com/stonebirds [Link removed by mod, no advertising] ... Damn those mods are always gettin ya :) Last edited by Stone Birds; 07-22-2010 at 12:01 PM.

05-25-2009, 10:25 AM	#49 (permalink)
Stone Birds myspace.com/stonebirdies Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Conor Oberst Was/is Here Posts: 1,401	Ha, that's amazing, but the sound it gives off has to be crappy __________________ Silk & Tree Records //\\//\\/\\/\/\/\\\\\\\\///\/\/\/\/\\////\/\\\\\///\V //\\//\\/\\/\/\/\\\\\\\\///\/\/\/\/\\////\/\\\\\///\V soundcloud.com/stonebirds [Link removed by mod, no advertising] ... Damn those mods are always gettin ya :)

05-22-2009, 11:39 PM	#42 (permalink)
Nicktarist young gun funyun Join Date: May 2009 Location: Southern US Posts: 166	Eh, the metaphor is still what's bothering me. It's rather wobbly in terms of meaning. I just kinda hear this 'feel good- God's Holy Ghost is here' type of thing that I hear from all the rich people at my church who are always 'slain in the spirit'. This is not to be harsh, but you should recognize that the topic you are singing on has to contain insight-not restate or redo what everyone else has done (whether it was a song or not). Your stuff has been great, in general, but you really need to sit down and think about what your saying in this song here before you consider it even nearly finished.

05-23-2009, 09:34 PM	#44 (permalink)
Nicktarist young gun funyun Join Date: May 2009 Location: Southern US Posts: 166	than don't force it. If you don't feel compelled to write the song than don't. Songwriting is about saying what you have or need to say--not what people want you to say.

05-24-2009, 12:42 PM	#46 (permalink)
Nicktarist young gun funyun Join Date: May 2009 Location: Southern US Posts: 166	so? what's your motivation?

05-25-2009, 10:38 AM	#50 (permalink)
Nicktarist young gun funyun Join Date: May 2009 Location: Southern US Posts: 166	ya, probably--it's a sculpture by a japanese artist who likes taking mass produced goods and 'extremefying' them in some form or another. I'm pretty sure he's also responsible for the largest pair of underwear in the world book of records (guiness)