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05-17-2009, 12:27 PM | #22 (permalink) |
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Peach Dream Quickly and endlessly it flows along the clouds the trees hang wildly they whisper wisdom It was Free I was free It was happy I was happy My Favorite Peach dream it killed reality i heard the colors and i saw the sounds |
05-17-2009, 01:23 PM | #23 (permalink) |
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Then, Ago This song is really personal so if you have tips or comments keep them away from the last verse“Those dead flowers will come back alive”The time we went to church |
05-17-2009, 02:30 PM | #24 (permalink) |
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I really like this one... it's simplicity gives it a down to earth feel, and it's unity keeps it all together. It had a feel good being sad effect on me...
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05-17-2009, 02:32 PM | #25 (permalink) |
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Are you talking about "Peach Dream" or "Then, Ago"?
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05-17-2009, 05:25 PM | #26 (permalink) |
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Rather nice (Then, Ago), It tells a story and it uses repetition rather cleverly. Now, you need to work on syllable count and rhyme. I use this rhyming dictionary sometimes when I write: Rhymezone.com -- The reason why this song is (in my opinion) better than the others I've seen is obviously because you had something important to say. When you write, it should be because you feel you have a story that you want people to hear -- put away the song for a week or two and then come back and sing it back to yourself once you've made all the tweeks to be had here. At that point, you'll be able to catch all the lines that you don't like or don't make sense.
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05-18-2009, 07:28 AM | #27 (permalink) |
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Thanks, man
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05-18-2009, 10:02 AM | #28 (permalink) |
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Sol y Luna (Sun and Moon)
La belleza dentro de la Tierra
The beauty within the Earth Vendrá salvarnos It will come to save to us sálvenos, oh nos salvan Save us, oh save us La luz del sol y de la luna The light of the sun and the moon Nos dirigirá it will guide us Diríjanos, oh diríjanos Guide us, oh guide us This song i originally wrote in Spanish, the English translations are in blue. if you notice any typos please tell me. |
05-18-2009, 03:45 PM | #30 (permalink) |
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thanks, how's your writing goin?
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