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Old 07-21-2010, 02:50 PM   #111 (permalink)
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Old 07-21-2010, 03:44 PM   #112 (permalink)
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Default A Breeze On the Sea
We will run to the sea
and we'll swim you and me

shore is clean sky i blue
perfect weather for me and you

so my love where's the boat
shall we sail for 10 days

there's a breeze on the sea
and i'm feeling free

there's a breeze on the sea
and i'm feeling free

We will run to the sea
and we'll swim you and me

Listen to it here: Stone Birds – A Breeze On the Sea – Listening & stats at Last.fm
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Old 07-21-2010, 03:53 PM   #113 (permalink)
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Default Origami Tea Leaves
in the corner there was an old broom
whose bristles were bein sucked up by the vacuum
you'll be sent into tonight's storm
please don't cry cause you cannot fight

there's no time for these things
cause god says i don't care for these things

origami tea leaves in a little old box
from a gray haired lady who's probably dead now
you'll be used till you're gone and forgotten
you cannot help this your end is eminent

there's no time for these things
cause god says i don't care for these things

there's no time for these things
cause god says i don't care for these things

Listen to it here:Stone Birds – Origami Tea Leaves – Listening & stats at Last.fm

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Old 07-21-2010, 04:40 PM   #114 (permalink)
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today i uploaded lyrics for 2 songs hopefully more will be uploaded tomorrow
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Old 07-25-2010, 01:50 AM   #115 (permalink)
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Default April
You're looking at Me
Something is happening
your face entrances me
on the spot in time
in april
i fell for you
in june i try to win ya back
in july i realize i'll never get you back



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Old 07-25-2010, 05:54 AM   #116 (permalink)
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You're looking at Me
Something is happening
your face entrances me
on the spot in time
in april
i fell for you
in june i try to win ya back
in july i realize i'll never get you back
I like the guitar and instrumentals very much, Stone Birds! A couple times I felt your voice was a little out of tune and the overdubbing made it hard to understand your voice.

I feel your lyrics would be improved by not repeating "back" in the final line, and instead finding another way to say that this person the singer fell for will never catch him. The relationship sounds very short, though this doesn't mean it wasn't important, but this made me feel that the seriousness of the song was out of proportion with what I'd expect after the break-up of a 2-month relationship.

I like NumberNine's mouth drawings!!...especially when the mouth becomes a black spot, echoing the idea of a "spot in time" that is in your lyrics!
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If a chicken was smart enough to be able to speak English and run in a geometric pattern, then I think it should be smart enough to dial 911 (999) before getting the axe, and scream to the operator, "Something must be done! Something must be done!"
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Wow. That's a great coincidence.
I just drew whatever the music inspired to me, because the lyrics aren't too understandable.
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Wow. That's a great coincidence.
I just drew whatever the music inspired to me, because the lyrics aren't too understandable.
I suspected the black spot in your video drawings wasn't intentionally there to correspond to the word "spot" in the lyrics, since they didn't occur at the same time...but wouldn't it be cool if they did? I think so, at least!

Since the song mentions someone's face, I thought your drawings of a face...very close up...made perfect sense...and the way the face got smaller and bigger could represent how one's feelings of closeness and connection to the person change as the quality of the relationship changes.

Of course, I've been known to "over-analyze," some people say. But it's such fun!!!!!
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I love hidden unintentional meanings. They're always the best.
Analyse away!!
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I love hidden unintentional meanings. They're always the best.
Analyse away!!
I love them, too! Though I probably love hidden *intentional* meanings more.

I have analyzed my ardor for analyzing, and my analysis is also that analyzing away is A-okay. I appreciate your approval!
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