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My first songs!! What do you think?
Hello everybody, I´m new here, and I just started writing some what i hopefully can be songs, Id like your honest opinion, they are not 100% finished yet, Ive written around 20 songs now, 2 of my songs:
---- Queen of bordeaux Somewhere between her glass and mind Driving questions to dead points Could it been her heart playing her blind Listening to some song with unkind words the bottle is calling her back her empty dreams so black She is the queen of bordeaux She is the queen of bordeaux Her teeth tells the truth Will she be breathing again She is lonely She is lonely Fill the gap with the blood that poison this beauty She will be the queen of her destiny Asking if her day has been okay Watching her hands shaking Hinding her fear behind that smile Would somebody worship her Listening to her weeping through the wine the life is calling her back her empty heart so black She is the queen of bordeaux She is the queen of empty glasses and broken hearts ..............------ Wishing on something I never thought there was so many stars upon us shining for the one who is waiting I never thought Id have a star shooting for me Where did you hide, did you not want to be bounded Floating up around and thinking You must have heard me hinting Wishing for a fantasy with no end Wishing for the magic to be mine I´ve never seen a heart so fine. There is only you To take me away Wanting for someone who makes me feel like you do. To think I am one of the few I wanted to tell you that night But your arms wouldn´t let me wait That there is nobody like you I never thought Id be in this state devoting an star falling down You must have heard me praying, saying. Wishing for a fantasy with no end Wishing for the dream to be mine I´ve never seen a heart as divine. There will be only you To take me away Wishing on something like you To take me with the storm Wishing on a dream to live by Through the hurting To always be mine Somewhere you will always be waiting |
Wow, what a great lyrics, you have amazing talent
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thank u so much, really nice to hear:) I think they could maybe be better somehow?
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I like the first one a lot as it has a nice gritty real life feel, however I'm not too fond of the second one mostly because the concept isn't something quite as interesting as the first.
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ReL: "Wishing on Somethng". Awesome lyrics ,that completely moved me because I imagined you wrote it for me! lol! I love your mind! Those are the lyrics of a very special, highly talented, creative artist/musician. Thank you forsharing. It made my night!
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wow! thanks thats nice to hear from you! Its my first songs and this really gives me confident to go further with my lyrics/ideas:)
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i like the first one really much, otherwise well done mate. Keep it up :D
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I hide behind this facade stars in your eyes is blinding my illusions Northernlight I call on you attack me above touch me from above suffocate the night Northernlight Northernlight Northernlight In this night I fall in A grief I cant recall your hands my pain Northernlight Sense my fear attack m from above touch me from nowhere suffocate the fear Northernlight Northernlight This night Holding my breath in this fire heart losing beats You say you say you did Northernlight wipe my tears with this power touch me from above Northernlight Northernlight tonight Northernlight you sense my fear tonight Come now to me Northernlight attack me free this last time |
great lyrics. do you write music also? i think you are onto a good start! very complex and doesnt give too much away. nice!
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rubbish and thats being generous
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moondust<-- says the one who cant even write songs, go and steal more songs:P
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Come now to me Northernlight attack me free this last time are copouts, because.... well, they're very generic. Don't let me discourage you though, you have some real potential talent, I would just say read more lyrics by the greats, poems AND songs. I would suggest Jeff Mangum (from the band Neutral Milk Hotel), he's my favorite lyricist of all time. |
nice !!!
can you play some instrument music? try to turn it into songs, or do you need some help? i though it will be more nice if someone can sing it. |
thanks!
I can´t play any instruments, and need help there, Im trying to find someone to work with.. I have kind of ideas in my head what the songs should sound like, but it might not be easy to make a song if you can´t play instruments.. I guess? |
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I have been thinking of just selling my lyrics to bands, as i dont think I have enough patience with making own music.. But is there many bands looking for lyricswriters ?
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Just ask around, maybe you'll find some local band in need of lyrics. |
I like the second one alot.
very talented. :bowdown: |
wrote one quick here now... sorry to bomb u with songs, just feeling very creative and need help :)
Last night I woke up from my dream that I never thought i would I learned something from this night That what you think might last might suddenly fade away without permission Beauty turns to ashes What once burned die out You still whisper in ace Reaching for something to far away Passion turns to ration of our old love Past is owned by empty hearts longing to live a dream we never got to fulfill Past was somewhere to hide when our dream could never come apart A wind melting ice in heaven My heart can´t find its place A wind carrying it away To be caught again Last night I fighted goodbye that i never thought i would win I learned some tears could end that night Our night that will stay forever might might not fade away In our hearts Carrier of our dreams Blowing over the fields Reaching out to somewhere Innocents will learn Someday what might comfort our hearts at rest |
i feel like buying this song it's nice and matches my style
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Thanks!! if you are interested in any lyrics , don´t hesitate to contact me:D
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i'm just wondering what the melody is to it. can you give me a sampl? (Maybe use youtube or somethin)
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I dont play instruments and find it hard to make a sample, but how you mean use youtube? I have a melody but its in my head:)
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just take a video or soemthing of it being sung.
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woow. love them , girl , yaah , you got talent :)
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Amazing
Hey! You are super talented. loved it!
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It's really, really good. One thing I think, though, is that it's a little too dark for my tastes. Maybe you could try putting it to some relaxed reggae to lighten up the mood? (jk)
I don't get the point of "Northernlight". As with all your stuff, it's very poetic, but I don't really know what it's about. It's good to have mystery, and it's good to have clarity, but you need more clarity and less mystery in that song. Also, remember, you have a talent, but it takes more than that. You also have to remember to not let the people who say "rubbish and that's being generous" let you down too much. You just can't please everybody. |
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I love northenlight! That's great stuff.
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I like the second one best, do you have rough recordings of them yet?
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I like the lyrics so much because they make sense which leads me to ask you for any advice you could give me on song writing
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