A short piece about a recent experience (quote)

**Janszoon** · 04-10-2009, 11:18 PM

A short piece about a recent experience

I hit my knee
on the motherfucking desk.
Roared out in pain
as the soft area
just above my kneecap
slammed into the corner
of the particleboard.

Who the hell
did they design this thing for?
This goddamn keyboard tray
is too fucking low.

gunnels · 04-11-2009, 12:18 AM

Sir, I'd say this is within the 1% percentile of quality on these boards.

**Janszoon** · 04-11-2009, 12:21 AM

I'm planning on applying for a grant next year. You know, to hone my skills.

Urban Hat€monger ? · 04-11-2009, 01:41 AM

needs to be more angsty

**Janszoon** · 04-11-2009, 01:45 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Urban Hatemonger

needs to be more angsty

I'll see if I can work in a line or two about cutting myself because no one understands me.

Urban Hat€monger ? · 04-11-2009, 01:56 AM

I hit my knee that was riddled with the cancer of you
on the motherfucking desk made from the wood of your uncaring heart
Roared out in pain made by your rejection
as the soft area that you made soft
just above my kneecap which was riddled with more of your cancer
slammed into the corner
of the particleboard like you slammed me into the corner of your mind

Who the hell
did they design this thing for? Was it you to torment me even more
This goddamn keyboard tray
is too fucking low for me to express the full extent of my suicidal thoughts.

Something like that

**Janszoon** · 04-11-2009, 02:02 AM

Thank you for your inspiring words! I agree the poem definitely needs more cancer. I'm thinking maybe I should end it like this too:

This low goddamn keyboard tray
isn't fucking low enough
for me to express the depths of my agony.

Urban Hat€monger ? · 04-11-2009, 02:03 AM

How about depths of despair

**Janszoon** · 04-11-2009, 02:05 AM

How about "malignant depths of my cancerous despair".

Urban Hat€monger ? · 04-11-2009, 02:07 AM

the lower reaches of my malignant tumourous depths of my cancerous despair

04-10-2009, 11:18 PM	#1 (permalink)
Janszoon Mate, Spawn & Die Join Date: May 2007 Location: The Rapping Community Posts: 24,593	A short piece about a recent experience A short piece about a recent experience I hit my knee on the motherfucking desk. Roared out in pain as the soft area just above my kneecap slammed into the corner of the particleboard. Who the hell did they design this thing for? This goddamn keyboard tray is too fucking low. __________________ A Night in the Life of the Invisible Man Time & Place 25 Albums You Should Hear Before the Moon Crashes into the Earth and We All Die last.fm

04-11-2009, 12:21 AM	#3 (permalink)
Janszoon Mate, Spawn & Die Join Date: May 2007 Location: The Rapping Community Posts: 24,593	I'm planning on applying for a grant next year. You know, to hone my skills. __________________ A Night in the Life of the Invisible Man Time & Place 25 Albums You Should Hear Before the Moon Crashes into the Earth and We All Die last.fm

04-11-2009, 01:41 AM	#4 (permalink)
Urban Hat€monger ? The Sexual Intellectual Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Somewhere cooler than you Posts: 18,605	needs to be more angsty __________________ Urb's RYM Stuff Most people sell their soul to the devil, but the devil sells his soul to Nick Cave.

04-11-2009, 01:56 AM	#6 (permalink)
Urban Hat€monger ? The Sexual Intellectual Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Somewhere cooler than you Posts: 18,605	I hit my knee that was riddled with the cancer of you on the motherfucking desk made from the wood of your uncaring heart Roared out in pain made by your rejection as the soft area that you made soft just above my kneecap which was riddled with more of your cancer slammed into the corner of the particleboard like you slammed me into the corner of your mind Who the hell did they design this thing for? Was it you to torment me even more This goddamn keyboard tray is too fucking low for me to express the full extent of my suicidal thoughts. Something like that __________________ Urb's RYM Stuff Most people sell their soul to the devil, but the devil sells his soul to Nick Cave.

04-11-2009, 02:02 AM	#7 (permalink)
Janszoon Mate, Spawn & Die Join Date: May 2007 Location: The Rapping Community Posts: 24,593	Thank you for your inspiring words! I agree the poem definitely needs more cancer. I'm thinking maybe I should end it like this too: This low goddamn keyboard tray isn't fucking low enough for me to express the depths of my agony. __________________ A Night in the Life of the Invisible Man Time & Place 25 Albums You Should Hear Before the Moon Crashes into the Earth and We All Die last.fm

04-11-2009, 02:03 AM	#8 (permalink)
Urban Hat€monger ? The Sexual Intellectual Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Somewhere cooler than you Posts: 18,605	How about depths of despair __________________ Urb's RYM Stuff Most people sell their soul to the devil, but the devil sells his soul to Nick Cave.

04-11-2009, 02:05 AM	#9 (permalink)
Janszoon Mate, Spawn & Die Join Date: May 2007 Location: The Rapping Community Posts: 24,593	How about "malignant depths of my cancerous despair". __________________ A Night in the Life of the Invisible Man Time & Place 25 Albums You Should Hear Before the Moon Crashes into the Earth and We All Die last.fm

04-11-2009, 02:07 AM	#10 (permalink)
Urban Hat€monger ? The Sexual Intellectual Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Somewhere cooler than you Posts: 18,605	the lower reaches of my malignant tumourous depths of my cancerous despair __________________ Urb's RYM Stuff Most people sell their soul to the devil, but the devil sells his soul to Nick Cave.