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03-08-2009, 06:22 PM | #1 (permalink) |
infamous nimbus
Join Date: Mar 2006
Posts: 140
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Thinking
Girl you've got me thinking
but mostly got me drinking and i haven't been this thirsty in a week I named my whiskey Selby and ill call you Aileen i wish you both would let me rest in peace [CHORUS] Theres only one thing i can do When you leave me so confused Im drinking about thinking about you [/CHORUS] Well i waited for your call and drank all my alcohol so now im out of everything i need I wish you'd stop this torture i never met a woman colder at least Selby puts a blanket over me. [CHORUS] I was waiting for your call and drank all my alcohol so now im out of everything i need Last edited by Jadix; 03-13-2009 at 08:42 PM. |
03-14-2009, 12:11 PM | #4 (permalink) |
"Hermione-Lite"
Join Date: Oct 2008
Location: New York.
Posts: 3,084
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I'm going to make notes as I read.
The first two lines have already thrown me off. It's very cliche... I like the second stanza. Is this a song or a poem? Overall, it's alright. I wasn't particularly impressed. And it would be nice to insert correct grammar and punctuation. |
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