Haiku: Time, free them (lyrics, member, quote, talent, song)

Schizotypic · 03-05-2009, 03:28 PM

Haiku: Time, free them
Judgement clock dread I
My young sickly flowers shall
Flourish as I die

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BoopieJones · 03-05-2009, 04:23 PM

haikus indeed show
The talent of one, yet not
in this case I fear.

Just messin with you. This is an interesting poem.

"My young sickly flowers" = sin?

nice.

Schizotypic · 03-06-2009, 06:13 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by BoopieJones

haikus indeed show
The talent of one, yet not
in this case I fear.

Just messin with you. This is an interesting poem.

"My young sickly flowers" = sin?

nice.

No, not sin.
You know though, when I write I try to make good metaphors but my meaning is (most likely) usually lost in vagueness I'm realizing. So, take from it what you do and if you like what you take- keep it, it's yours.

03-05-2009, 03:28 PM	#1 (permalink)
Schizotypic Souls of Sound Sailors Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Mojave Posts: 759	Haiku: Time, free them Haiku: Time, free them Judgement clock dread I My young sickly flowers shall Flourish as I die Possibly to a moderator: I posted this thread a couple hours ago only to find later that it was not anywhere to be found in the songwriting forum. I then checked my own posts to see if it was my mistake, and I found it in that thread. So if you moved it for some reason (because it is not allowed as a thread), please notify me via PM as to the reasons why (I don't remember reading anything against it in the rules) after you delete my second attempt at it.

03-05-2009, 04:23 PM	#2 (permalink)
BoopieJones Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: SI, NY Posts: 54	haikus indeed show The talent of one, yet not in this case I fear. Just messin with you. This is an interesting poem. "My young sickly flowers" = sin? nice.