deep_and_depressing

I don't have issues. I'm perfectly happy with my life right now.

__________________
My life was like a fairytale . . . Except I left Mr. Charming for his sister

deep_and_depressing

hmmmmm... I honestly don't know.

__________________
My life was like a fairytale . . . Except I left Mr. Charming for his sister

7gaugejames

now the world has gone to bed
darkness wont engulf my head
i can see by infrared
how i hate the night

(pausing to gather the artistic and emotional strength to tackle the next verse)

now i lay me down to sleep
try to count electric sheep
sweet dream wishes you can keep
how i hate the night

Marvin the manic robot ; Douglas Adams R.I.P.

__________________
I don't care who you are, Gunslinger, shmunslinger, everyone needs a good purse.

adidasss

Maybe you should stop. Or start reading dude, because this is some seriously trite shit. Poetry is supposed to be at least a little challenging.

__________________
“Think of what a paradise this world would be if men were kind and wise.” - Kurt Vonnegut, Cat's Cradle.

Last.fm

Janszoon

Read some poetry. At least some Federico García Lorca or e. e. cummings or something.

__________________
A Night in the Life of the Invisible Man

Time & Place

25 Albums You Should Hear Before the Moon Crashes into the Earth and We All Die

last.fm

Double X

I think it would be nice instead of writing 20 mediocre ones, you save all those ideas and merge them into one average one.

Schizotypic

Greatest Poems Ever Written, Famous Poems, Great Poems, Best Poems
There, go read soemthing good.

Maybe you should look-up some Sylvia Plath, she uses perspective really well. Emily ****enson has great use of irony. Robert Frost, or anyone on the above list. I didn't read all of these, but if your going to post 20,000 poems a day you should at least understand what aspects of it actually make it poetry.

Here, touch-up on your poetic techniques.
Poetry Writing Techniques, Poetic Tips, Poem Techniques
Why don't you try using rhyme to actually enhance the meaning of your poetry instead of put limits on it in your next one? Or forget rhyme completely, I personally hate it. Use rythm, use meter, incorporate the flow into the mood. Try using subtlety, imply a point instead of saying it. Try using diction, take advantage of a words connotation- choose words that mean exactly what you mean. I'm not saying master poetry, I'm far far far from it, but at the least understand it. For the love of god!

At least read this! Poetry Writing Techniques, Poetic Tips, Poem Techniques
...please?

Schizotypic

I think your goal should be to write a poem that isn't easily understood the very first time you read it, means something, and uses poetic some poetic techniques. Try spending three hours on a really good poem instead of twenty or thirty minutes on a crappy one. No offense.

adidasss

And by all means, read Rainer Maria Rilke's Letters to a young poet.

__________________
“Think of what a paradise this world would be if men were kind and wise.” - Kurt Vonnegut, Cat's Cradle.

Last.fm

TheBig3

This is called John Frusciante syndrome.

Also, rhyming is something only the very great, and the very terrible do. On your climb to the former, under no circumstance should you rhyme. It is the dark side of poetry, and its seductive, but it will destroy you.

__________________
I've moved to a new address