darkcornerinthecloset's Songwriting Journal

darkcornerinthecloset · 02-25-2009, 07:57 PM

but. . .i dont wanna die!!!

Schizotypic · 02-25-2009, 08:12 PM

Listen, you two, it really is getting annoying. To me, whatever talent or time you spent on these countless, tedious, seriously getting old, teenage-bleeding heart sob stories that you feel so strongly about as to spam the songwritting forum with, is completely lost. I know your situation and it is not that bad, you don't need to write the same poem/song differently twenty times over to vent, get over yourselfs and go work through your issues via Pm or something.

FireInCairo · 02-25-2009, 08:32 PM

MAybe you should stop writing then....

likuidcoka · 02-25-2009, 08:38 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by darkcornerinthecloset

You say my behavior is horrible
My social skills are deplorable
Curse me out for being who I am

You live in a shallow world
Full of shallow people
with many masks to wear

When I don't talk I have nothing to say
Why are you against keeping it that way?
You curse me out for being who I am

You live in a world of pretty people
When somewhere in them is the groaning mass
of who they are in truth

You say I act different when I'm around you
That's because you and me are through
I don't want to be your daughter anymore

Disown me, why don't you?
No, wait, but what would people say?
Gossip and talk is a trivial thing

You want me to be a perfect daughter
a poster child for your maternal slaughter
Where I go you cannot follow

Who I am is someone you don't know
Where I go at night is somewhere you cannot follow
Into my dreams, or something more?

You curse me out for being who I am
But I cannot live in your lifelong sham
I'll escape the moment I turn eighteen

Let me free from this genetic
hold you keep on my life
Let me learn from my own mistakes

A sheltered child goes nowhere in this
cold, dark world
of empty people

You have the nerve to say I, I am two-faced
And that the faces are not pretty
At least they are real and not wrought of Botox and Plastic Surgery

I don't love you
In fact, I don't even LIKE you
In fact, I can barely STAND you

But this is just who I am
Deal with it
You're the one who made me

good drop.

deep_and_depressing · 02-26-2009, 09:21 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by darkcornerinthecloset

What IS tangible is the springtime sun
Your lips upon my neck
Your fingers resting in my hand
the gentle caress is soft and pleasing

I still LOVE this stanza haha.
I the song is fine the way it is overall though.

adidasss · 02-26-2009, 09:32 AM

I hope you're both in your younger teens.

deep_and_depressing · 02-26-2009, 09:39 AM

uh... yeah.

TheBig3 · 02-26-2009, 09:43 AM

I want to know what ****ing poetry you people read.

Name your two favorite poems.

deep_and_depressing · 02-26-2009, 09:45 AM

None unless I'm forced to.

TheBig3 · 02-26-2009, 09:47 AM

Why do you write it then?

02-25-2009, 08:32 PM	#73 (permalink)
FireInCairo Later on... Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: Melbourne Posts: 1,235	MAybe you should stop writing then.... __________________ O G MUDBONE: Only You can prevent forest fires.

02-26-2009, 09:32 AM	#76 (permalink)
adidasss Slavic gay sauce Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Abu Dhabi Posts: 7,993	I hope you're both in your younger teens. __________________ “Think of what a paradise this world would be if men were kind and wise.” - Kurt Vonnegut, Cat's Cradle. Last.fm

02-26-2009, 09:39 AM	#77 (permalink)
deep_and_depressing Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2008 Posts: 73	uh... yeah. __________________ My life was like a fairytale . . . Except I left Mr. Charming for his sister

02-26-2009, 09:43 AM	#78 (permalink)
TheBig3 killedmyraindog Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Boston, Massachusetts Posts: 11,172	I want to know what ****ing poetry you people read. Name your two favorite poems. __________________ I've moved to a new address

02-26-2009, 09:45 AM	#79 (permalink)
deep_and_depressing Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2008 Posts: 73	None unless I'm forced to. __________________ My life was like a fairytale . . . Except I left Mr. Charming for his sister

02-25-2009, 07:57 PM	#71 (permalink)
darkcornerinthecloset Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Rochester, NY Posts: 160	but. . .i dont wanna die!!!

02-25-2009, 08:12 PM	#72 (permalink)
Schizotypic Souls of Sound Sailors Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Mojave Posts: 759	Listen, you two, it really is getting annoying. To me, whatever talent or time you spent on these countless, tedious, seriously getting old, teenage-bleeding heart sob stories that you feel so strongly about as to spam the songwritting forum with, is completely lost. I know your situation and it is not that bad, you don't need to write the same poem/song differently twenty times over to vent, get over yourselfs and go work through your issues via Pm or something.

02-26-2009, 09:47 AM	#80 (permalink)
TheBig3 killedmyraindog Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Boston, Massachusetts Posts: 11,172	Why do you write it then? __________________ I've moved to a new address