darkcornerinthecloset's Songwriting Journal

chard · 02-20-2009, 05:23 PM

very deep i like it .

darkcornerinthecloset · 02-20-2009, 06:44 PM

Turn away from me
I don't wanna see your face
Run away from me my life's worth s***
But what can I do 'bout that?

Leave me be
don't wanna see your face
Feel the desolation
Indifference and yet I care

Look in a mirror, Medusa
Turn yourself to stone if you can
Let me live my life without your
looming shadow over me

I didn't mean to wrong you
Now i just want escape
Release your hold that's over me
And let me still fly free

I don't wanna see your face
or all the farce and crap it brings
Don't wanna see your face
or all the misery

'Cause i feel pain
A cold dry wind
The fingertips are
brushing on my skin

And I get chills
To hear your name
the whispers in a
dark and dreary room

And i don't wanna see your face
The face of the broken
The face of the dead
The face of all who burn in hell

The anger is controlling me
So i don't wanna see your face
or think about the adverse effects
you speaking has on me

Leave me the hell alone
I don't wanna talk to you
I don't wanna see your face
just let me go and get on with my life

right-track · 02-21-2009, 01:56 AM

angsta'

Schizotypic · 02-21-2009, 11:44 AM

I like it a lot better then some of your other stuff. I enjoy things aimed at the world. You should try playing around with perspective, I think you'll enjoy it. Talk from the perspective of mother nature or something.

darkcornerinthecloset · 02-21-2009, 02:06 PM

My first poem. odd. to borrow a quote, "a slightly MORE depressing poem?"
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I have nothing to say worth hearing
Nothing to do that's worth doing or
that's worth having been done by me

I am a failure
At life, at death
At in between

I have Idle time
To fill with pain
Its better than nothing

I have done nothing in this life
Perhaps the next one will be better
Moving on, looking forward

Looking up or looking down
Wherever this world takes me
I am a failure put me out of your mind

Come in last in a marathon
Trip over your feet while standing still
I failed to succeed I succeeded to fail

Moving on, looking forward
Perhaps the next one will be better
Perhaps I'll get what I deserve

I deserve nothing
I have nothing to say worth hearing
I have done nothing that's worth being done

I am a failure
Forever and always
And I have achieved nothing

darkcornerinthecloset · 02-21-2009, 02:15 PM

your right. it is VERY cliche. I'll go back and change that. and I'll shorten it just a tad

darkcornerinthecloset · 02-21-2009, 02:23 PM

Agony
its taking away the best of me
Throwing me away
No knife across my wrist
just plain old pain i know Your

Beautiful
I saw the day I met you I would
fall for you
But maybe not today

I see it clearly now
Don't want what i can have
I see it clearly now
What stands in front of me

Agony
its ripping apart me
Leaving chills across my spine
Throwing me into the pits of hell This

Jealousy
why does it still exist?
I see your name possessive and
insane I am

Therapy
am I disturbed or just insane
just tell me now
the anger, death, and lust will stay but

Agony is able to decide
I'm just not worth it anymore
Broken beyond reason beyond
any possible stability

She loves me still and yet he
Loves me still
but I hate myself still
So where can I now turn?

Drown the flesh in water so the devils finally die

Agony
stay the hell away from me
Let the drugs the knife, the drinks still come
Leave me to my pain and all its f***ing side effects

Taking me away, you can
save me from the pain it brings
save me from the death it brings
save me from this Agony
your saving cup can do it all my pastor says

Agony is able to decide
Agony is able to decide
Agony is able to decide that I'm not worth it anymore
Broken beyond reason beyond pain

Urban Hat€monger ? · 02-21-2009, 02:50 PM

Don't start a new thread just because you changed a couple of lines.

Feign · 02-21-2009, 06:43 PM

I really enjoyed this, there were a few parts that I weren't sure about, but the uncertainty of it sort of adds to it, if you get what I mean. Good Job!

Feign · 02-21-2009, 07:07 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by right-track

angsta'

that just made my day.

And to the OP, All I'm going to say is that I have more sympathy for the person the speaker (I'm assuming is you) is yelling at..

02-20-2009, 06:44 PM	#12 (permalink)
darkcornerinthecloset Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Rochester, NY Posts: 160	I Don't Wanna See Your Face Turn away from me I don't wanna see your face Run away from me my life's worth s*** But what can I do 'bout that? Leave me be don't wanna see your face Feel the desolation Indifference and yet I care Look in a mirror, Medusa Turn yourself to stone if you can Let me live my life without your looming shadow over me I didn't mean to wrong you Now i just want escape Release your hold that's over me And let me still fly free I don't wanna see your face or all the farce and crap it brings Don't wanna see your face or all the misery 'Cause i feel pain A cold dry wind The fingertips are brushing on my skin And I get chills To hear your name the whispers in a dark and dreary room And i don't wanna see your face The face of the broken The face of the dead The face of all who burn in hell The anger is controlling me So i don't wanna see your face or think about the adverse effects you speaking has on me Leave me the hell alone I don't wanna talk to you I don't wanna see your face just let me go and get on with my life

02-21-2009, 02:06 PM	#15 (permalink)
darkcornerinthecloset Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Rochester, NY Posts: 160	Failure My first poem. odd. to borrow a quote, "a slightly MORE depressing poem?" ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I have nothing to say worth hearing Nothing to do that's worth doing or that's worth having been done by me I am a failure At life, at death At in between I have Idle time To fill with pain Its better than nothing I have done nothing in this life Perhaps the next one will be better Moving on, looking forward Looking up or looking down Wherever this world takes me I am a failure put me out of your mind Come in last in a marathon Trip over your feet while standing still I failed to succeed I succeeded to fail Moving on, looking forward Perhaps the next one will be better Perhaps I'll get what I deserve I deserve nothing I have nothing to say worth hearing I have done nothing that's worth being done I am a failure Forever and always And I have achieved nothing Last edited by darkcornerinthecloset; 02-21-2009 at 02:13 PM.

02-21-2009, 02:23 PM	#17 (permalink)
darkcornerinthecloset Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Rochester, NY Posts: 160	Agony [revised version if anyone cares] Agony its taking away the best of me Throwing me away No knife across my wrist just plain old pain i know Your Beautiful I saw the day I met you I would fall for you But maybe not today I see it clearly now Don't want what i can have I see it clearly now What stands in front of me Agony its ripping apart me Leaving chills across my spine Throwing me into the pits of hell This Jealousy why does it still exist? I see your name possessive and insane I am Therapy am I disturbed or just insane just tell me now the anger, death, and lust will stay but Agony is able to decide I'm just not worth it anymore Broken beyond reason beyond any possible stability She loves me still and yet he Loves me still but I hate myself still So where can I now turn? Drown the flesh in water so the devils finally die Agony stay the hell away from me Let the drugs the knife, the drinks still come Leave me to my pain and all its f***ing side effects Taking me away, you can save me from the pain it brings save me from the death it brings save me from this Agony your saving cup can do it all my pastor says Agony is able to decide Agony is able to decide Agony is able to decide that I'm not worth it anymore Broken beyond reason beyond pain

02-21-2009, 02:50 PM	#18 (permalink)
Urban Hat€monger ? The Sexual Intellectual Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Somewhere cooler than you Posts: 18,605	Don't start a new thread just because you changed a couple of lines. __________________ Urb's RYM Stuff Most people sell their soul to the devil, but the devil sells his soul to Nick Cave.

02-20-2009, 05:23 PM	#11 (permalink)
chard Music Addict Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: england Posts: 390	very deep i like it .

02-21-2009, 01:56 AM	#13 (permalink)
right-track Atchin' Akai Join Date: May 2005 Location: Unamerica Posts: 8,723	angsta'

02-21-2009, 11:44 AM	#14 (permalink)
Schizotypic Souls of Sound Sailors Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Mojave Posts: 759	I like it a lot better then some of your other stuff. I enjoy things aimed at the world. You should try playing around with perspective, I think you'll enjoy it. Talk from the perspective of mother nature or something.

02-21-2009, 02:15 PM	#16 (permalink)
darkcornerinthecloset Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Rochester, NY Posts: 160	your right. it is VERY cliche. I'll go back and change that. and I'll shorten it just a tad

02-21-2009, 06:43 PM	#19 (permalink)
Feign Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: California Posts: 66	I really enjoyed this, there were a few parts that I weren't sure about, but the uncertainty of it sort of adds to it, if you get what I mean. Good Job!