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02-21-2009, 05:11 PM | #21 (permalink) |
Groupie
Join Date: Feb 2009
Location: Alberta, Canada
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wow. why don't you call it "Rhyming couplets In Menopause"?
It's overly emotional, and it's got no flow.
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01-10-2010, 11:04 PM | #24 (permalink) | |
FakingSuicideForApplause
Join Date: Jul 2009
Location: I live in a van down by the river
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01-19-2010, 12:33 PM | #25 (permalink) | |
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Join Date: Jan 2010
Location: In the moment
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I think when reviewing this, you have to remember that most people who write aren't writing about themselves- they like to create characters. While songwriting is more often than not autobiographical, I highly doubt this is.
That said, I really dislike some of the language. Just not my style. It also seems to not have very much of a flow. But that's kinda hard to tell over the 'net. Quote:
I think that the last bit is the best, but still. You'd better have one nice beat to put this too, or else it's just not going to be very good. |
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