Lyrics (song)

ewel · 02-02-2009, 05:26 AM

nice song.. keep it up....
hehe write more songs... kk??

~~ninaNirvana~~ · 02-02-2009, 02:12 PM

IMHO- nice try...but

1) too angry.

2) too cliché.

3) too contrived.

Solution:

Try to examine the reasons behind the strong emotions instead of concentrating on a style that might not be your true voice...unless you simply want to do do something that has been done before. Also, I will concede that maybe we need to hear this on a track to "get it"

Elvon · 02-02-2009, 02:17 PM

Waste of time? :P Lol

Gazz_Evans · 02-02-2009, 03:15 PM

I think it's good, maybe too much for one song?

spread it out into like, four songs, get a decent beat, couple of guitarists and maybe some anti depressants?

Ace · 02-11-2009, 01:41 AM

Yeahhh.........**** this.

You just need your ass beat by your mom some more.

Trendkiller · 02-11-2009, 01:44 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Ace

Yeahhh.........**** this.

You just need your ass beat by your mom some more.

I have to agree. But to be fair, garbage like this is pretty common in rap. *Sits and waits for the hate mail*

aveneficus · 02-11-2009, 05:58 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Surell

Sounds like one long Eminem ripoff.

Exactly my thoughts.

The Robot Hunter · 02-16-2009, 12:26 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by N00bie

(spoke)
Oright look, I have a lot of ****ing **** on my chest;
a lot of ****ed up ****.
(/spoke)

If i'm deciphering the "*****"'s correctly, then the first is fucking and the second is shit and if you look at this whole rap from the perspective of someone who's been an unwilling member of a scat video it's pretty alright.

darkcornerinthecloset · 02-21-2009, 12:45 PM

swearing gets you nowhere; ease off on language. when half your words are bleeped no one even cares about flow they just sit there and wonder what ur even talking about

darkcornerinthecloset · 02-21-2009, 02:11 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by aveneficus

Exactly my thoughts.

Well, i suppose you call yourself trend killer for a reason. but i have to agree that rap generally, GENERALLY, DOES suck.

02-02-2009, 05:26 AM	#11 (permalink)
ewel Groupie Join Date: Feb 2009 Posts: 3	nice song.. keep it up.... hehe write more songs... kk??

02-02-2009, 02:12 PM	#12 (permalink)
~~ninaNirvana~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Miami, FL Posts: 118	IMHO- nice try...but 1) too angry. 2) too cliché. 3) too contrived. Solution: Try to examine the reasons behind the strong emotions instead of concentrating on a style that might not be your true voice...unless you simply want to do do something that has been done before. Also, I will concede that maybe we need to hear this on a track to "get it"

02-02-2009, 02:17 PM	#13 (permalink)
Elvon Music Addict Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Uppsala/Sweden Posts: 62	Waste of time? :P Lol

02-02-2009, 03:15 PM	#14 (permalink)
Gazz_Evans Groupie Join Date: Feb 2009 Posts: 9	I think it's good, maybe too much for one song? spread it out into like, four songs, get a decent beat, couple of guitarists and maybe some anti depressants?

02-21-2009, 12:45 PM	#19 (permalink)
darkcornerinthecloset Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Rochester, NY Posts: 160	swearing gets you nowhere; ease off on language. when half your words are bleeped no one even cares about flow they just sit there and wonder what ur even talking about