Silence Falls Upon Us (Metal Lyrics) (member, myspace, track, quote)

Frozen Angel · 01-20-2009, 05:08 PM

Silence Falls Upon Us

As we walk to the rhythm of falling snow
Our crimson lines shall not be traced

Brought down and left behind
Silence is all that falls upon us
No one around for miles
Cold, alone but pushing forward

Impaled upon thorny crowns
In search of deliverance
Only to be denied of being whole

There is no refuge here
Nothing to fill the hollows that we bear
Just to condemn the fallen

Brought down and left behind
Silence is all that falls upon us
No one around for miles
Cold, alone but pushing forward

As we await our destilution (drawing near)
Another falls defeated (down to the ground)
Knowing we are not heading home

I know the first verse is MUCH shorter than the second. But it was written to go with the guitar track I was given. I might make it longer later. I wrote this a while ago, and now I have trouble making sense of it. Or why I wrote of the lines the way I did. Maybe re-wording some of it might be a good idea...any suggestions? I don't swear in my songs, depsite some of the dark meanings.

Frozen Angel · 01-20-2009, 05:26 PM

nope, I remember what it means now...and what is about...hehe. been a while

PerfectRandomness · 01-24-2009, 06:52 PM

i like this a lot but to flow better with the rhythm, you probably should do some rewording.

Double X · 01-27-2009, 06:21 PM

I liked it - as long as you sing it correctly. Don't try to put a melody into it, this is the type of lyrics that would sound better independent from the rest of the music, if that makes any sense.

Frozen Angel · 02-04-2009, 03:25 AM

how bout if it is growled? ..and it flows fine with the song.

Lutherfish · 02-05-2009, 08:16 PM

Yeah, I agree. If it goes with the music, well you got yourself a song.
And growling it would work well with that idea.
Does your band perhaps have a MySpace or Soundclick?
I'd like to hear the song.

Frozen Angel · 02-06-2009, 02:59 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Lutherfish

Yeah, I agree. If it goes with the music, well you got yourself a song.
And growling it would work well with that idea.
Does your band perhaps have a MySpace or Soundclick?
I'd like to hear the song.

We dont have this song up on the net anywhere as of yet. BUT my band does have a few other songs up that I have posted lyrics to. Death Reckoning on MySpace Music - Free Streaming MP3s, Pictures & Music Downloads.

I could put this one up in a different place for you to hear if you want. It is in rough form with no drums in it, lol. but guitar and vocals are there.

Guybrush · 02-06-2009, 08:59 AM

Since you're probably after more constructive feedback than just "it's good" or "it sucks", I'll say that the first line doesn't really work for me.

Quote:

As we walk to the rhythm of falling snow

I see you use a lot of metaphors and then you can do whatever, but this semi nonsensical line seems a little out of place to me. As you know, falling snow doesn't really have a rhythmn .. and nonsensical metaphors should be more appearant, I think.

Other than that, I kinda like it although I've no idea what it's supposed to mean and that can make it harder to judge.

Frozen Angel · 02-06-2009, 09:38 AM

well then I thought everyone knew that snow falls slow, therefor it has a slow rhythm. It is apparent that you cannot decipher metaphors all that well.

Guybrush · 02-06-2009, 09:48 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Frozen Angel

well then I thought everyone knew that snow falls slow, therefor it has a slow rhythm. It is apparent that you cannot decipher metaphors all that well.

Actually, an ice crystal falls, then maybe it's resuspended if windy and then it falls again. It's hardly worthy of being called a rythmn. Obviously, you are talking about the collective rhythmn of all the snowflakes, but if you think practically, you should immediately realize at least two things :

With our perception of time, when it snows, snow hits the ground all the time so if it made a sound, it should be continous .. not rhythmic.
You don't really hear snow falling.

So there's your logical response. Put simpler, I just don't like the metaphor very much. There's no real need for you to be so defensive, I did write that I liked the lyrics, didn't I? If you ask for people's opinions and constructive feedback, don't complain when you get it.

01-20-2009, 05:08 PM	#1 (permalink)
Frozen Angel Groupie Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Canada Posts: 41	Silence Falls Upon Us (Metal Lyrics) Silence Falls Upon Us As we walk to the rhythm of falling snow Our crimson lines shall not be traced Brought down and left behind Silence is all that falls upon us No one around for miles Cold, alone but pushing forward Impaled upon thorny crowns In search of deliverance Only to be denied of being whole There is no refuge here Nothing to fill the hollows that we bear Just to condemn the fallen Brought down and left behind Silence is all that falls upon us No one around for miles Cold, alone but pushing forward As we await our destilution (drawing near) Another falls defeated (down to the ground) Knowing we are not heading home I know the first verse is MUCH shorter than the second. But it was written to go with the guitar track I was given. I might make it longer later. I wrote this a while ago, and now I have trouble making sense of it. Or why I wrote of the lines the way I did. Maybe re-wording some of it might be a good idea...any suggestions? I don't swear in my songs, depsite some of the dark meanings.

01-24-2009, 06:52 PM	#3 (permalink)
PerfectRandomness Groupie Join Date: Jan 2009 Posts: 14	i like this a lot but to flow better with the rhythm, you probably should do some rewording. __________________ I unlit the light to embrace the dark To be near but not to turn into you my darling Forever we're lost in our souls' storm Reflections of each other's faults

01-20-2009, 05:26 PM	#2 (permalink)
Frozen Angel Groupie Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Canada Posts: 41	nope, I remember what it means now...and what is about...hehe. been a while

01-27-2009, 06:21 PM	#4 (permalink)
Double X sleepe Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: boston Posts: 1,140	I liked it - as long as you sing it correctly. Don't try to put a melody into it, this is the type of lyrics that would sound better independent from the rest of the music, if that makes any sense.

02-04-2009, 03:25 AM	#5 (permalink)
Frozen Angel Groupie Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Canada Posts: 41	how bout if it is growled? ..and it flows fine with the song.

02-05-2009, 08:16 PM	#6 (permalink)
Lutherfish Groupie Join Date: Feb 2009 Posts: 20	Yeah, I agree. If it goes with the music, well you got yourself a song. And growling it would work well with that idea. Does your band perhaps have a MySpace or Soundclick? I'd like to hear the song.

02-06-2009, 09:38 AM	#9 (permalink)
Frozen Angel Groupie Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Canada Posts: 41	well then I thought everyone knew that snow falls slow, therefor it has a slow rhythm. It is apparent that you cannot decipher metaphors all that well.