So Many Scars (memories, song)

aveneficus · 01-04-2009, 08:54 PM

This is a song I wrote a long time ago but have since transformed into a poem.

So Many Scars
Hurtful memories,
Bringing back her mind games.
Slits upon his wrist,
A reminder, he'll never be the same.
Pictures of her,
Thrown on the floor with broken frames.
Holes in the wall,
The remains of his fists of rage.

"Forgive and Forget,"
Is never of any use.
Cause how could he,
Forgive all of her abuse.
And how could he,
Forget all the things they went through

Any criticism/response is appreciated.

deep_and_depressing · 01-06-2009, 05:35 PM

That's really good! I love it!

Arya Stark · 01-12-2009, 09:11 PM

And you were writing about yourself or someone else?

aveneficus · 01-13-2009, 02:17 PM

someone else... a subconscious-esque character in my mind

Arya Stark · 01-13-2009, 05:13 PM

Well done.

Frozen Angel · 01-15-2009, 08:39 PM

DYSFUNCTIONAL : awesome literary tantrum. Must've been a pretty crappy fight for whoever it is about.

01-04-2009, 08:54 PM	#1 (permalink)
aveneficus Groupie Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: Cincinnati, OH Posts: 44	So Many Scars This is a song I wrote a long time ago but have since transformed into a poem. So Many Scars Hurtful memories, Bringing back her mind games. Slits upon his wrist, A reminder, he'll never be the same. Pictures of her, Thrown on the floor with broken frames. Holes in the wall, The remains of his fists of rage. "Forgive and Forget," Is never of any use. Cause how could he, Forgive all of her abuse. And how could he, Forget all the things they went through Any criticism/response is appreciated.

01-06-2009, 05:35 PM	#2 (permalink)
deep_and_depressing Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2008 Posts: 73	That's really good! I love it! __________________ My life was like a fairytale . . . Except I left Mr. Charming for his sister

01-13-2009, 02:17 PM	#4 (permalink)
aveneficus Groupie Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: Cincinnati, OH Posts: 44	someone else... a subconscious-esque character in my mind __________________ If dreams are like movies, then memories are films about ghosts

01-12-2009, 09:11 PM	#3 (permalink)
Arya Stark "Hermione-Lite" Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: New York. Posts: 3,084	And you were writing about yourself or someone else?

01-13-2009, 05:13 PM	#5 (permalink)
Arya Stark "Hermione-Lite" Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: New York. Posts: 3,084	Well done.

01-15-2009, 08:39 PM	#6 (permalink)
Frozen Angel Groupie Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Canada Posts: 41	DYSFUNCTIONAL : awesome literary tantrum. Must've been a pretty crappy fight for whoever it is about.