FireInCairo

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Yukon Cornelius

I dont get it

Killertu

.....I don't even know what the song suppose to go,I just wrote randomly and wrote the song out later but that the final draft of that part.......IF u haven't check out my other creation,check this post if u haven't seen it (the site url).com/song-writing-lyrics-poetry/35813-take-me-parody.html

PS:I haven't got 15 post yet...till noobs to site

Well what am really meaning is the song is not support with correct past or present tense or other stuff like that,it just needed to sound good....I don't even know what am saying here but u get it???....any one can explain for me???

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JDrum115

are you saying she makes you a better person and because she makes you a better person youre worthy of her love? hard to describe but i think i feel what youre saying.

also, if the song makes sense to you then its fine. a lot of songs only make sense to the writers. anyone who disagrees with that is just ignorant.

EDIT: after readin some more posts it sounds like youre saying you dont even know hwat it means and you just put something together. if so, then thats stupid

mr dave

if you're not concerned with the proper use of a language within a song then why use it? especially if, as you say, you don't even know what you're saying.

a song doesn't 'need' to make sense, but there's a difference between a song that is written to be vague and a song that doesn't make sense because it mangles a language. sorry, no offense intended, but...

kind of hurts to read... maybe try something like this instead

It's you, to whom I become true
It's you, that makes me new
It's you, and only you
Making me someone for you

it's not that great but it's not as broken.

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FireInCairo

I think you need to re-evaluate your usage of the english language.

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Killertu

OUCH that hurt.......I really needed to rewrite my english but, love that remake you wrote.

But well I can't take that seen it wouldn't be my....ahhh....almost type in mind XD well I did but rewrote it XC

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FireInCairo

The western world obviously needs to get serious about education.

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mr dave

consider it a free edit, it's still your lyrical idea.

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Killertu

Coolio, but I'm gonna stick with my draft, it gonna hard to remember what not my

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