Old Lyrics - Critique Please

ibelieveyou - j · 11-18-2008, 10:18 PM

My words ran away, a minute ago
Slow motion drama, just for show
You say that I'm wrong
To switch off and on
This conversation turns things upside down

I couldn't choose, just what to know
If i lit the wick, if this would explode
You say that I'm wrong
To shout this down the phone
This conversation turns things upside down

Arya Stark · 11-20-2008, 10:35 AM

I personally have always had a problem with saying "phone" in my lyrics.

Maybe it's the fact that it modernizes the music too much?

I don't know.

~~someonecompletelyrandom~~ · 11-20-2008, 10:18 PM

I agree... just me though.

Arya Stark · 11-20-2008, 10:23 PM

=P It's not just you.

It's me, too.

And hey, are you following me? =P

~~someonecompletelyrandom~~ · 11-20-2008, 10:25 PM

*shady eyes*... No.

11-18-2008, 10:18 PM	#1 (permalink)
ibelieveyou - j Groupie Join Date: Nov 2008 Posts: 1	Old Lyrics - Critique Please My words ran away, a minute ago Slow motion drama, just for show You say that I'm wrong To switch off and on This conversation turns things upside down I couldn't choose, just what to know If i lit the wick, if this would explode You say that I'm wrong To shout this down the phone This conversation turns things upside down

11-20-2008, 10:35 AM	#2 (permalink)
Arya Stark "Hermione-Lite" Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: New York. Posts: 3,084	I personally have always had a problem with saying "phone" in my lyrics. Maybe it's the fact that it modernizes the music too much? I don't know.

11-20-2008, 10:18 PM	#3 (permalink)
~~someonecompletelyrandom~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Nov 2008 Posts: 4,538	I agree... just me though.

11-20-2008, 10:23 PM	#4 (permalink)
Arya Stark "Hermione-Lite" Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: New York. Posts: 3,084	=P It's not just you. It's me, too. And hey, are you following me? =P

11-20-2008, 10:25 PM	#5 (permalink)
~~someonecompletelyrandom~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Nov 2008 Posts: 4,538	shady eyes... No.