Chard's Songwriting Journal (lyrics, techno, dance, metal, Kiss) - Music Banter Music Banter

Go Back   Music Banter > Artists Corner > Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry
Chard's Songwriting Journal Chard's Songwriting Journal (lyrics, techno, dance, metal, Kiss)
Register Blogging Today's Posts
Welcome to Music Banter Forum! Make sure to register - it's free and very quick! You have to register before you can post and participate in our discussions with over 70,000 other registered members. After you create your free account, you will be able to customize many options, you will have the full access to over 1,100,000 posts.

 
 
Thread Tools Display Modes
Prev Previous Post   Next Post Next
Old 04-28-2009, 12:01 PM   #11 (permalink)
Groupie
 
int3r4ct's Avatar
 
Join Date: Apr 2009
Location: The deepest depths of Hell
Posts: 20
Default
Quote:
Originally Posted by coryallen2 View Post
no
Good input once again cory.

Quote:
Originally Posted by chard View Post
I sense my mind being renewed
by faith im closer still, to you
My lord my god the allmighty.
After having an aabb rhyming pattern, it would seem odd to put this here unless you wanted it to seem abrupt.

Also, "allmighty" should be "almighty"

The lyrics seem alright if you're going for a gospel/soft/love type song.
__________________
It is better to keep your mouth closed and let people think you are a fool than to open it and remove all doubt.
-Mark Twain
int3r4ct is offline   Reply With Quote
 

« Previous Thread | Next Thread »

Similar Threads


Terms & Privacy - Contact Us - Music Banter - Archive - Top

© 2003-2025 Advameg, Inc.