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Old 04-09-2009, 03:17 PM   #11 (permalink)
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I've got a couple beefs with this poem/thing.
The first is that almost the whole way through it doesn't really have a pattern.
The second is that the last line kind of comes out of no where.
I did get the point of the poem though, so kudos.
Maybe a little more structure would serve you well?
It was nice though.
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