Arya Stark

Are you one of those people who posts and posts and posts and then doesn't answer when someone replies? That's unfortunate.

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MB Journal.
Azucar y Especia. My blog.

chard

Ready for anything, ready to take control
i have been absent for too long.
Now that i have opened my eyes,
now that i am alive. Now that i see the truth,
I am conscious now looking at you.
The confusion i was feeling has all but gone,
I now stand in glory not alone.

Deserted left for dead, they never knew me, i haven't been well read
or they would have made sure that i was really dead.
Before leaving me a trail of deciet, that leads to a house down the street.
They just didn't do their homework on me.

Battered and bruised i started to cruise, my destination number 2
down the street where local hoods meet,
somewhere to go when feeling low, to bounce back on your feet.
Well i was right, there they were, for a flash, on my bonnet anyway,
under my wing should i say. That felt good, i feel better now,
though there won't be any escape for me, trapped under a dark cloud.

Sure enough i took three out with a fatal blow,
but there are more than three, that sacrificed me down the hole.
So i watch while they load there guns,
and empty there rounds into me,
Oh what fun, seeing my life flash before me.

I was given a second chance but i failed miserably,
I decided to take revenge, and thats why life has been taken from me.

Scarlett O'Hara

Ok this just confirms what I was thinking. Far there's pages and pages of the same ****. Whats the point of writing if you don't respond to others opinions/pointers?

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Bulldog

Exactly what I've been thinking. Scary thing is, this thread's been going about a year and a half too.

Scarlett O'Hara

Do you think its spam or he's just got major social issues? Could be a bot for all we know.

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Bulldog

I thought so at first, but I don't think so. None of this stuff's been posted on any other message boards or blogs, at least so far as I can tell. Plus, he made a couple of other threads in the lounge way back when.

I think this guy's just relentless and doesn't realise there are much better places than MB to post nothing but poetry for criticism, especially if you don't wanna bother acknowledging people who've gone through the effort of reading and understanding your work.

VEGANGELICA

Chard responded fairly early on to some comments in his thread.

I recommend you PM Chard if you have questions. That's what I did months ago. He is not a bot. I think like most people, he appreciates constructive comments.

I think sometimes writers feel it helps them to post what they are writing just to share what they are thinking and to inspire others to write regardless of feedback. Also, even if he doesn't respond to much feedback doesn't mean he doesn't appreciate it.

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chard

Under your spell i dwell in and out of both worlds,
I know i decide on where i fly so nothing is lost.
Found a place i belong now i am comforted,
all is new and interesting i am one with you.

Wait for the signal that will guide you to me,
I will greet you with open arms you just wait and see.
Friends are hard to come by so i am wanting,
their will only be a short gap in time to go hunting.
Dream a little love a lot, is there anything iv'e forgot,
help to guide me through, i love you.

I wait for your time, you will soon be mine,
waiting for you i'm out on a limb.
waiting yes i am sure your be kinder than all
a life wanting to live.

Mystical woman from afar, guiding angel to my star
flowing from the star dust realm, i'm here waiting by my self.
Reality needs to kickstart can't afford to stay to long
or i may just fall into the pit and then i will be gone.

Together forever i do need you
guide me into your arms for an eternity
drive me a bolt of passionate light
life eternal day and night.

Embracing is tasteing what is to come,
unforgetting the setting of the sun.

chard

J ust when i feel i'm over you
i see you with another guy
i feel like hitting something, i feel i want to cry.
When i see you and your laughing without any tears in your eyes,
i can't help but feel as happy as a man knowing he's soon to die.

How can you not feel anything i am destroyed,
makes me mad that your not feeling, i'm really annoyed.
The man your with must be encredibly wonderful,
for you to forget me within one month or is it more.

Hopelessly devoted well if that were true,
i'd still be in a relationship with you.
I'm not going to lie, i wont even try,
I just never wanted to say goodbye.

Spend so much time living together, living side by side,
then one day it's over and the emptyness collides.
It's good to break up but its better if we dont and we get back together,
thats what i hoped but now i know it now won't be ever.

A broken heart that will never heal,
we tell ourselves that next time we won't feel.
But it just like a line a spinning reel, another bad deal.
Going home alone to watch a bit of tv,
how depressing is that well it is to me.
Can't get you now out of my head,
heading for my pillow early to bed
can't say i will be doing anything instead
have a great time my pretty, cus i'm dead.

chard

A request is in for a transfer,
I brought it to their attention amediatley, i want out of here
I want to be- free.
Wasteing awa---y in a dead end job
nothing would please more, than changing my lively hood.

A position has opened in a different department
something that i feel strongly about
I'm going for it with determination, i have to win this for myself......,

Some people dream some people scheme
but i will overcome by determination.
Keep your trump card til the last,
drive to win your future is not your past
so you won't come in last, thats determination.

Everyone is the same theirs no one better or worse,
so i drive myself knowing this and all will be revealed.
Don't be alarmed it's not an illusion,
stepping into a world of confusion,
where by theirs no certain conclusion.
Only faith in one self can you overcome,
with the odds stacked up against you, never turn and run.

If you decide to stand still then you won't experience any sudden thrills,
and your success rate will rate nil and all will be lost.
Push to succeed and push to win,
never forget why your doing it.