Exposing the exposed
We loathe those who owe
back taxes, bank loans
child support, let alone
alimony the phony fix that doesn't fix it
sexists process I contest to amend don't get it twisted
A man is a man not a nine number digit
a woman for that matter the same, what the fuck is this
Pulled over by smokey, cause my tint is resistant
to those who oppose the constitution, and my rights in it
the right to my space, and that that's within it
the right to drive safe, and at the speed limit
but the problem is that's not the way this guy sees it
It's his job to rob and steal and appeal to the district
the judges whose names are framed with their image
on the walls of the halls we most hate to visit
choose to resist, what they wish to impose
be stronger then them, better then those
who instead of side stepping, would step on your toes
when right is projected wrong is exposed.

Originally Posted by TheBoozeIsBack (Post 509101) ^ That's absurd. I love this piece. It's very real, and honest, speaks the truth and the voice isn't shaking, either. I always like this type of stuff. I wouldn't change a thing. This isn't a constructive response but I felt compelled to tell you how much I liked it and appreciated it's voice.

Originally Posted by netherlane (Post 508834) What did you get the ticket for?

Originally Posted by Whatsitoosit (Post 511369) wasn't it obvious? "cause my tint is resistant " :p: Not bad Jay, of course this may work extremely well to music... as a written piece I felt the beginning and end flowed nicely and the middle not so much. A lot of the end rhymes and phrasing were like mini stop signs for me but overall I felt it was well thought out.

Originally Posted by Whatsitoosit (Post 511448) ahhh, gotcha (makes sense)... it seemed like you had a plan, I just didn't catch onto it. Anyway, good job... even if you didn't sit there working things through, it reads as a well put together piece of poetry.