TakenTheCoast

The city lights
(As they pass by)
The writing on the walls pictures of this all

I know now what you think of me
(Thinking now you never told me)
I know now what you think of me
(Thinking now you never told me)

The way you walk
Compliments the way you talk
And it looks so good
(It looks so good)
Slip off your fingertips
I taste him on your lips like I know you would
(I know you would)

And I regret
(The things I've said)
But it doesn't matter anyways

I know now what you think of me
(Thinking now you never told me)
I know now what you think of me
(Thinking now you never told me)

The way you walk
Compliments the way you talk
And it looks so good
(It looks so good)
Slip off your fingertips
I taste him on your lips like I know you would
(I know you would)

I know now what you think of me
I know now what you think of me
I know now what you think of me
(Thinking now you never told me)

The way you walk
Compliments the way you talk
And it looks so good
(It looks so good)
Slip off your fingertips
I taste him on your lips like I know you would
(I know you would)

pheurton

dull

lucifer_sam

Songs without verses tend to get boring quickly.

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FireInCairo

I would reconsider you're structure, your themes, your choice of words and phrasing...in short most everything. Reading some good poetry may be good.
no offence...its a subjective art

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guitargirl_93

Honestly, I just skimmed through, because I got bored. :/

I agree with FireInCairo.

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Son of JayJamJah

people will always be critical and usually they're correct, it's more about delivery in terms of lyrics.

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If you're posting in the music forums make sure to be thoughtful and expressive, if you're posting in the lounge ask yourself "is this something that adds to the conversation?" It's important to remember that a lot of people use each thread. You're probably not as funny or clever as you think, I know I'm not.

My Van Morrison Discography Thread

Skigh

"I know now what you think of me"( and you say it three times in a row in your song.) (thinking now you never told me) With all that, I'm thinking and wondering? What is that you know and what did she say about you? What DOES she thinks of you, were you wonderful or bad? This could be the best part. lol. ( what she thinks of you?)

Stone Birds

Not a bad start, you should add some verses.