Please Review This Song Let Me Know. Its Called:Blood Filled Tears (lyrics, hardcore)

Clear Gunshot · 06-28-2008, 07:51 AM

Verse1
Entombed again behind my fears
a silent vengeance burns inside
my pain reflected in my blood filled tears
spilled over memories of wasted years

Bridge
i can see deep inside
inside my blood filled tears
the faces of the dead
burned into my head

Chorus
everytime i close my eyes
i wait for the sun to rise
as i lay down my head
i wait for the end

Verse2
trapped in these chains i cant break free
my hopes lie dying on the ground
my blood all around me
these walls will be the last thing i see
Bridge repeat

breakdown
FALLING INSIDE
TO MY ETERNAL DEMISE
SUFFERING FOR YOUR WRONGS
SUFFERING FOR YOUR LIES

Bridge repeat

Chorus repeat

If You Have A Better Name Let Me Know Aswel

taylrtokio · 07-01-2008, 04:17 PM

Well I liked this(:my only thing is how the song is going to sound and be presented because i could see this going in the direction of being exactly like everything else.
good lyrics though.

bsmix · 07-01-2008, 04:28 PM

I really like the feeling of it. It's awesome in it's expressiveness and conciseness. I'm not a fan of emo/ hardcore lyrics, which I think this is. I think your work is great but it seems like there is a cliche in every line, like "entombed", "vengeance burns inside", "blood filled tears", etc. Not fair that I don't really like the genre, but it seems like a good emo song.

06-28-2008, 07:51 AM	#1 (permalink)
Clear Gunshot Groupie Join Date: Jun 2008 Posts: 1	Please Review This Song Let Me Know. Its Called:Blood Filled Tears Verse1 Entombed again behind my fears a silent vengeance burns inside my pain reflected in my blood filled tears spilled over memories of wasted years Bridge i can see deep inside inside my blood filled tears the faces of the dead burned into my head Chorus everytime i close my eyes i wait for the sun to rise as i lay down my head i wait for the end Verse2 trapped in these chains i cant break free my hopes lie dying on the ground my blood all around me these walls will be the last thing i see Bridge repeat breakdown FALLING INSIDE TO MY ETERNAL DEMISE SUFFERING FOR YOUR WRONGS SUFFERING FOR YOUR LIES Bridge repeat Chorus repeat If You Have A Better Name Let Me Know Aswel

07-01-2008, 04:28 PM	#3 (permalink)
bsmix Music Addict Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: California Posts: 179	I really like the feeling of it. It's awesome in it's expressiveness and conciseness. I'm not a fan of emo/ hardcore lyrics, which I think this is. I think your work is great but it seems like there is a cliche in every line, like "entombed", "vengeance burns inside", "blood filled tears", etc. Not fair that I don't really like the genre, but it seems like a good emo song. __________________ a music nazi....is still a nazi

07-01-2008, 04:17 PM	#2 (permalink)
taylrtokio Groupie Join Date: Jul 2008 Posts: 8	Well I liked this(:my only thing is how the song is going to sound and be presented because i could see this going in the direction of being exactly like everything else. good lyrics though.