winigwl

I've never written a song before and i wrote this and i don't know if its any good so i'm looking for some feedback. anything you can offer, as mean as it may possible be would be helpful
thanks in advance

The Sirens

I saw him in the ocean
And I saw he couldn't swim
But no one knew just who he was
Cos everyone was him
As I tried to save him
The sirens brought me down
And no one was there to save me
Cos everyone had drowned

Now my eyes are burning
And I'm drowning in the sea
Now the tides are turning and
There's no one to save me

Don't let them see you
And please do not be you
Because before you become them
You're already among them

Try to fight the sirens but
There's nothing we can do
They think that they are always right
But they never see our view
And when you step into the water
The sirens pull you in
No matter who you are in there
The sirens always win

Now the sirens laugh
Because they know that they have won
But nothing is that funny
About what I have become

Don't let them see you
And please do not be you
Because before you become them
You're already among them