First Song I Have Written- Please Give Tips

funsizedgrl · 06-16-2008, 12:02 AM

i like it!

46secondanthem · 06-18-2008, 09:16 PM

oh by the way, I thought it was awsome. That last post was just a tip.

thedaytripper · 07-08-2008, 12:36 PM

I think its beautiful. expand on it if you can, maybe a few different words here in there, but i enjoyed it alot!

Son of JayJamJah · 07-08-2008, 12:53 PM

Strictly criticism:

Don't worry about rhyming every word or using every word when you sing it. You don't need to paint the whole picture, leave some mystery and something to the imagination.

I have plenty positive to say, but that won't help you. Good Luck.

06-16-2008, 12:02 AM	#11 (permalink)
funsizedgrl Groupie Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: Iowa Posts: 6	i like it! __________________ Fun-sized Does a platypus participate in a cat rodeo?[SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]

06-18-2008, 09:16 PM	#12 (permalink)
46secondanthem Groupie Join Date: Jun 2008 Posts: 11	oh by the way, I thought it was awsome. That last post was just a tip.

07-08-2008, 12:36 PM	#13 (permalink)
thedaytripper Groupie Join Date: Jul 2008 Posts: 30	I think its beautiful. expand on it if you can, maybe a few different words here in there, but i enjoyed it alot!

07-08-2008, 12:53 PM	#14 (permalink)
Son of JayJamJah Occams Razor Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: End of the Earth Posts: 2,472	Strictly criticism: Don't worry about rhyming every word or using every word when you sing it. You don't need to paint the whole picture, leave some mystery and something to the imagination. I have plenty positive to say, but that won't help you. Good Luck.