Don'tSaveYourBreath

new song I am working on, I think I have it done but feed back would be great before it gets recorded. Thank you.

the band I am in is a Pop Punk / Emo band.. if that needs to be taken into consideration.


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Hey Katie I'm in over my head,
And every backstep you take keeps me wanting you...

(verse 1)
They say you're dressed to kill.
I say you're a serial killer, your on a rampage.
I don't want to be a statistic;
So I hope I can survive.
And we'll take a ride, (on)
"High Horsebacks" and no straps;
Cause' you live your life on the wild side.

(bridge)
My fix... your kiss
Will be the antidote to my lips
But it's never been so hard for me to say "it's easy"

(chorus)
Take my heart,
Take my heart and make it real.
Kiss these lips I use to fake the way I feel.
Write up my prescription.
We both know I'm way too far along.
Tighten my straps and pad my walls,
Cause' you drive me crazy. Hey Katie.

(verse 2)
I'm never around.
They say absense makes the heart grow stronger,
And we built it, so we're in shape (and)
I'm not letting go-
But I can't explain,
Just how I'm alive cause my heart skips a beat..
..every time the color of your eyes change.

(bridge)
My fix... your kiss
Will be the antidote to my lips
But it's never been so hard for me to say "it's easy"

(chorus)
Take my heart,
Take my heart and make it real.
Kiss these lips I use to fake the way I feel.
Write up my prescription.
We both know I'm way too far along.
Tighten my straps and pad my walls,
Cause' you drive me crazy. Hey Katie.

(ending)
Duct tape my fingers together
So I know, I won't let you slip away from me.
The best thing that's never happened (x3)
.. To me.

hxcveggies

AHH! I love it x]

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ohjessie

Very good! I'd love to hear it with instruments too.

cdipp009

Really nice lyrics. I liked it a lot.

DontRunMeOver

I think this lyric is too wordy to make a good pop song. It could do with having about half as many words.

And before anybody thinks of any arguments against this, I'm right. Bear that in mind.

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funsizedgrl

awesome.
love it.
wanna hear it when you record!

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