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Old 04-20-2008, 05:30 AM   #1 (permalink)
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lyrics to an as-of-yet-untitled song.

with your tongue free of teeth you'll scream satellites
and swallow a sun that never shines
your eyes swelled to immeasurable size
raining on us it feels
like love
like love
like love

any feedback is appreciated.
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Old 04-20-2008, 12:52 PM   #2 (permalink)
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What's the tune like?
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Old 04-28-2008, 08:26 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Good so far... keep writing this!
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Old 05-07-2008, 09:38 AM   #4 (permalink)
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So far it seems like perfect poetry... makes little to no sense and sounds very clever

good job.

I would like to hear or read it when it is finished.
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