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01-04-2008, 01:08 AM | #1 (permalink) |
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Critique my song please
Hey all... new here
Looking for general critiques on my new song. Can be found here: Stay With Me Title: Stay With Me Lyrics: If you know the way home I will gladly follow Can't live with the idea that I'll still be here tomorrow So hold my hand I've come so far I've travelled from A distant star So stay with me Through the night I need to be where My past is out of sight So stay with me(x3) I need you The blackest ash, Volcano spit Smears my face I'm drowning in it So carry me Please pick me up I can't walk much further I'm sorry, forgive me So stay with me(x3) I need you If you know the way home I will gladly follow Can't live with the idea that I'll still be here tomorrow Thanks! Last edited by boxcarguy07; 01-05-2008 at 01:17 PM. Reason: Changed link to song |
01-04-2008, 01:46 AM | #3 (permalink) |
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None, sir. It was my first post.
I doubt I'd be of much help with critiquing people... I'm not much of a lyricist, I know mine are really simple. I was more looking for a critique of the recorded song, as well as the lyrics. However, I will do my best to add to the community, and will be adding my two cents where I see fit. |
01-04-2008, 01:32 PM | #5 (permalink) | |
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I remixed it... if you don't mind, let me know if it sounds any better! |
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