(No title yet) (band, emo)

Angstmuffin · 12-30-2007, 06:59 PM

I wrote this the other day... its very piecy and rough, but any feedback would be helpful...

No need to hide/It rains it pours/No don't cry/It will live,won't it live/ but these fears hide behind my eyes/ I want to be held/ these suspicions grow/I am ill in the heart/ these tears are on lock down/ i have emotion don't you feel me sigh/ i have a heart still don't you see me cry// boundaries and lines/ deception and lies/laws broken and abandoned/why wont you leave me alone/words stuck in my throat/tears fall from my eyes/this isn't meant to be/ i want to be left alone//that mirror reflects the light it burns my eyes/i shiver in the cold frozen like snow/ i don't feel the pain i dont want you to stay// why am i so cold/ perfection surrendered a long time ago/why can't you leave me alone/ why am i so cold/i just want to be held/what does it mean to be held//

tkpb938 · 12-30-2007, 08:14 PM

It was good. Too emo for my taste tho.

Angstmuffin · 12-31-2007, 12:55 AM

err, thnx lol

12-30-2007, 06:59 PM	#1 (permalink)
Angstmuffin Groupie Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Earth. Or so i think Posts: 23	(No title yet) I wrote this the other day... its very piecy and rough, but any feedback would be helpful... No need to hide/It rains it pours/No don't cry/It will live,won't it live/ but these fears hide behind my eyes/ I want to be held/ these suspicions grow/I am ill in the heart/ these tears are on lock down/ i have emotion don't you feel me sigh/ i have a heart still don't you see me cry// boundaries and lines/ deception and lies/laws broken and abandoned/why wont you leave me alone/words stuck in my throat/tears fall from my eyes/this isn't meant to be/ i want to be left alone//that mirror reflects the light it burns my eyes/i shiver in the cold frozen like snow/ i don't feel the pain i dont want you to stay// why am i so cold/ perfection surrendered a long time ago/why can't you leave me alone/ why am i so cold/i just want to be held/what does it mean to be held// Last edited by Angstmuffin; 12-31-2007 at 12:54 AM.

12-30-2007, 08:14 PM	#2 (permalink)
tkpb938 Lvl 70 Troll Hunter Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Sunny Phoenix Posts: 482	It was good. Too emo for my taste tho.

12-31-2007, 12:55 AM	#3 (permalink)
Angstmuffin Groupie Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Earth. Or so i think Posts: 23	err, thnx lol