modern gypsy
 

before i continue with it i want some opinion,

Modern Gypsy

Watch her just walk on by, walk on by,
The noose around her neck was too tightly tied,
A modern gypsy without a name, without a name,
The story is always the same

every time you walk on by, walk on by
I always try to stop you to try to tell you hi,
But your simple life would rather have you die, have you die,
But I will always come back to you,

Watch this gypsy just walk on by, walk on by
Each day I ask your name but its always the same,
Never able to say the line, say the line,
Before you run out of time.

tell you hi, is rather out of pace

seems a bit childish for some reason... but i say continue with it..

it doesnt really go with it and i was going to change it when i got the chance

What is it supposed to be about?

about more or less wondering person that was seen ans couldnt get out of the head

wtf is a modern gypsy

Hmm....kind of like a mystery woman. I'd reform it, just because I'm not really a fan of the structure. I don't know if I'd stick with the title either....modern doesn't really apply to gypsy, since there's still plenty around. Perhaps something like "Gypsy Woman". But that kind of reminds me of a title from ELO (I think), called "Witchy Woman". It's a good concept. Just try redoing some of it.

i can see the patterns in a million other songs.
spew your mind.
and rearrange it.