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12-18-2007, 02:57 AM | #1 (permalink) |
Long time no see
Join Date: Jun 2006
Location: somewhere in Michigan
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modern gypsy
before i continue with it i want some opinion,
Modern Gypsy Watch her just walk on by, walk on by, The noose around her neck was too tightly tied, A modern gypsy without a name, without a name, The story is always the same every time you walk on by, walk on by I always try to stop you to try to tell you hi, But your simple life would rather have you die, have you die, But I will always come back to you, Watch this gypsy just walk on by, walk on by Each day I ask your name but its always the same, Never able to say the line, say the line, Before you run out of time.
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12-18-2007, 08:14 AM | #2 (permalink) |
Music Rapist
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tell you hi, is rather out of pace
seems a bit childish for some reason... but i say continue with it..
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12-19-2007, 09:32 PM | #7 (permalink) |
Ad Astra
Join Date: Jul 2006
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Hmm....kind of like a mystery woman. I'd reform it, just because I'm not really a fan of the structure. I don't know if I'd stick with the title either....modern doesn't really apply to gypsy, since there's still plenty around. Perhaps something like "Gypsy Woman". But that kind of reminds me of a title from ELO (I think), called "Witchy Woman". It's a good concept. Just try redoing some of it.
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