Haiku (goth, quote, suicide)

Trauma · 12-12-2007, 11:13 PM

You’ve blossomed- known Truth:
“What’s done cannot be undone.”
Seung-Hui Cho, take care.

-Jake V.

Dizzys in the wolf · 12-13-2007, 01:09 PM

I would never dream of considering him blossomed in any way.

Ace · 12-14-2007, 06:01 AM

Eh. I've only seen one haiku to ever catch my interest. They just seem too short for me to get into em'.

Trauma · 12-17-2007, 12:21 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dizzys in the wolf

I would never dream of considering him blossomed in any way.

"What's done cannot be undone" is a line spoken by Lady Macbeth in Shakespeare's Macbeth.
At the end of the play she commits suicide.
I used "blossomed" to represent suicide and "Truth" to symbolize knowledge of the after life.

Jadix · 12-20-2007, 12:16 AM

wow. he didnt commit suicide, he committed mass homicide suicide. he was weak so he couldn't handle his situation rationally. I hate dumbass college kids as much as the next guy, but i wouldn't call killing 32 people "blossoming"

Jadix · 12-20-2007, 12:18 AM

+ points for writing something so offensive though

Trauma · 12-23-2007, 03:07 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Jadix

wow. he didnt commit suicide, he committed mass homicide suicide. he was weak so he couldn't handle his situation rationally. I hate dumbass college kids as much as the next guy, but i wouldn't call killing 32 people "blossoming"

I'm not trying to be an asshole and using some random verb (mind you, it takes up three syllables) in the midst of a 17 syllable haiku, that would be unethical.
I'm trying to construct a metaphor, using an allusion to set the tone.
The metaphor is such:
Our lives are flowers.
Our perspectives are always encompassed by the petals.
Once we die, the petals unfold.

Ace · 12-23-2007, 03:14 AM

I like that one ^ a hell of alot better.

Trauma · 12-23-2007, 03:28 AM

That explanation,
Or are you trying to be facetious?

Ace · 12-23-2007, 03:40 AM

The haiku at the bottom of your other post. Petals. That one is quite nice.

12-12-2007, 11:13 PM	#1 (permalink)
Trauma snickers Join Date: Mar 2005 Location: detroit Posts: 2,194	Haiku You’ve blossomed- known Truth: “What’s done cannot be undone.” Seung-Hui Cho, take care. -Jake V. __________________ A mi no me importa nada Para mi la vida es un sueño

12-13-2007, 01:09 PM	#2 (permalink)
Dizzys in the wolf Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Ireland Posts: 158	I would never dream of considering him blossomed in any way. __________________ There’s something about seeing this city at night Where we can say what we want and do what we like. These streets are empty but we don't feel alone, We can run in the dark and sleep on the roads.

12-23-2007, 03:28 AM	#9 (permalink)
Trauma snickers Join Date: Mar 2005 Location: detroit Posts: 2,194	That explanation, Or are you trying to be facetious? __________________ A mi no me importa nada Para mi la vida es un sueño

12-20-2007, 12:16 AM	#5 (permalink)
Jadix infamous nimbus Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 140	wow. he didnt commit suicide, he committed mass homicide suicide. he was weak so he couldn't handle his situation rationally. I hate dumbass college kids as much as the next guy, but i wouldn't call killing 32 people "blossoming"

12-20-2007, 12:18 AM	#6 (permalink)
Jadix infamous nimbus Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 140	+ points for writing something so offensive though