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That day you woke up
banging your fist on the hospital doors waiting for a sign of life, it never comes and now you're done sitting in the next room while they exchange stories of how far you've come, but your tears won't stop falling you can't sleep you never have nice dreams with each day you trust them less and less good bodies bad brains, tell yourself you're not obsessed keep your curtains closed so the world outside will never know you're fucked and lonely keep it to yourself, the best you can, if no one hears you break down then it never happened keep your fists bloodied and your head against the wall if it's gonna see you through it try anything at all |
with each day you trust them less and less
good bodies bad brains, tell yourself you're not obsessed keep your curtains closed so the world outside will never know you're ****ed and lonely Picked up some really cool momentum and the rythem really came through strongly for me but the last line of it kinda cuts it short. |
I would suggest changing the second to last line, and working the story out more to sorrow, instead of anger. But this is definately an improvement. Keep workin'.
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