Jesus Christ I'm Amazing - The poetic updates of a madman (single, quote, guitar)

TheBig3 · 07-30-2005, 07:18 PM

People who don't give people crtisism shouldn't have their work reviewd. People want help but don't want to give any. Unionize. Don't tolaerate the one-way members of this forum.

riseagainstrocks · 08-05-2005, 06:22 PM

good call.

i'm kinda tired of posting songs that myself and friends and outsiders (teachers and such) think is good and than not have any comments on them. and then people who post songs about cutting themselves get praise that it's deep.

so i will now write a song about cutting myself.

"the razor traces my veins. and i stand in the shower
the blood goes down the drain. i hate you.

i like to wear all black and do nothing but glower.
i wear mascara but don't call me ***. i hate you.

this is a cry for attention but i won't cut too deep.
i don't want to die only for people to think i'm poetic"

that was too easy. now i'm a crazy good artist! right? nope.

sleepy jack · 08-06-2005, 12:01 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by riseagainstrocks

good call.

i'm kinda tired of posting songs that myself and friends and outsiders (teachers and such) think is good and than not have any comments on them. and then people who post songs about cutting themselves get praise that it's deep.

so i will now write a song about cutting myself.

"the razor traces my veins. and i stand in the shower
the blood goes down the drain. i hate you.

i like to wear all black and do nothing but glower.
i wear mascara but don't call me ***. i hate you.

this is a cry for attention but i won't cut too deep.
i don't want to die only for people to think i'm poetic"

that was too easy. now i'm a crazy good artist! right? nope.

OMFG RISE YOUR AMAZING!YOU'LL BE DA NEXT STERIOTYPICAL EMO STAR!!!

hahah sorry i had to...

Ill try and comment more i promise.

TheBig3 · 08-08-2005, 07:07 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by riseagainstrocks

good call.

i'm kinda tired of posting songs that myself and friends and outsiders (teachers and such) think is good and than not have any comments on them. and then people who post songs about cutting themselves get praise that it's deep.

that was too easy. now i'm a crazy good artist! right? nope.

That was phenominal. I think too many people fall hard for the forelorn in their early teen years.

By 20 they think "what a moron I was"

All these people that think, im so alone, im the only one that thinks like this...theres millions of you, if you got out and were social you'd know this. DAMN YOU EMO.

TheBig3 · 08-13-2005, 09:41 AM

I was recently admonished and chastised for never submitting a song of my own and to anyone else in the forum that feels im an ass for not submitting, allow me to say why.

For one thing, I don't necessarily agree with this forum because we are writing "songs" yet theres no music to accompany the words. In my mind, its not a song. Its a poem or a badly strung together set of words. I've never complained about it, I just never wrote.

I did, however, decide to give people feed back because if anything sucks more then hearing your writing is terrible, its hearing nothing at all. People put work into these things and I felt they at least deserved a responce. Appreantly I've done too little.

In an attempt to clear the air you should discuss whether people should have to submit to participate or not. I for one am done responding to things in here, but you should at least set ground rules for the forum.

riseagainstrocks · 08-13-2005, 10:02 AM

I like your criticism...but i understand where your coming from.

i think however that song is the lyrics and music is the sounds. whateva though.

TheBig3 · 08-30-2005, 10:25 PM

Yeah alright this place is growing cobwebs and I have my problems with this forum, but maybe all it needs is a jumpstart. That being said, this is a crap poem I wrote back in 2002 (may maybe) for one of my poetics classes. It was the first one I did, so as you can imagine...

People Props
[My Name Here]

I watch the Eleanor Rigby’s of life
From benches in parks and
The bus seats of rapid transit
Existing

Statues of flesh
Living Decorations
Breathing Christmas Ornaments
Filler

They are extras in a movie
Or muzak in a mall
There to fill the gap
That exists without there menial presence

They’re on time
They crawl on all fours
Walk down the aisle and put
Both feet in the grave

Can they fathom?
Running, diving, swinging
What they must think as they pass
When they see me
Sitting
On a bench in the park

Hype8 · 08-31-2005, 08:41 AM

I actually like this one. Normally poems are a bit dull to me cause of the lack of rhymes and stuff, but I liked this one nice job.

TheBig3 · 08-31-2005, 06:12 PM

Thanks, having not seen it since its submission (i got it from the word file) theres alot I would edit, but I do appreciate the sentiment.

riseagainstrocks · 08-31-2005, 09:27 PM

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Originally Posted by TheBig3KilledMyRainDog

They’re on time
They crawl on all fours
Walk down the aisle and put
Both feet in the grave

awesome line. really awesome in fact. not sure why just the image I saw when i read it.

and I don't know who Eleanor Rigby is and something tells me that will result in a summary execution but whateva

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07-30-2005, 07:18 PM	#1 (permalink)
TheBig3 killedmyraindog Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Boston, Massachusetts Posts: 11,172	Jesus Christ I'm Amazing - The poetic updates of a madman People who don't give people crtisism shouldn't have their work reviewd. People want help but don't want to give any. Unionize. Don't tolaerate the one-way members of this forum. __________________ I've moved to a new address

08-05-2005, 06:22 PM	#2 (permalink)
riseagainstrocks Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: DC Posts: 3,320	good call. i'm kinda tired of posting songs that myself and friends and outsiders (teachers and such) think is good and than not have any comments on them. and then people who post songs about cutting themselves get praise that it's deep. so i will now write a song about cutting myself. "the razor traces my veins. and i stand in the shower the blood goes down the drain. i hate you. i like to wear all black and do nothing but glower. i wear mascara but don't call me ***. i hate you. this is a cry for attention but i won't cut too deep. i don't want to die only for people to think i'm poetic" that was too easy. now i'm a crazy good artist! right? nope. __________________ One note timeless, came out of nowhere...

08-13-2005, 09:41 AM	#5 (permalink)
TheBig3 killedmyraindog Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Boston, Massachusetts Posts: 11,172	Why I don't write I was recently admonished and chastised for never submitting a song of my own and to anyone else in the forum that feels im an ass for not submitting, allow me to say why. For one thing, I don't necessarily agree with this forum because we are writing "songs" yet theres no music to accompany the words. In my mind, its not a song. Its a poem or a badly strung together set of words. I've never complained about it, I just never wrote. I did, however, decide to give people feed back because if anything sucks more then hearing your writing is terrible, its hearing nothing at all. People put work into these things and I felt they at least deserved a responce. Appreantly I've done too little. In an attempt to clear the air you should discuss whether people should have to submit to participate or not. I for one am done responding to things in here, but you should at least set ground rules for the forum. __________________ I've moved to a new address

08-13-2005, 10:02 AM	#6 (permalink)
riseagainstrocks Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: DC Posts: 3,320	I like your criticism...but i understand where your coming from. i think however that song is the lyrics and music is the sounds. whateva though. __________________ One note timeless, came out of nowhere...

08-30-2005, 10:25 PM	#7 (permalink)
TheBig3 killedmyraindog Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Boston, Massachusetts Posts: 11,172	This forum seems dead Yeah alright this place is growing cobwebs and I have my problems with this forum, but maybe all it needs is a jumpstart. That being said, this is a crap poem I wrote back in 2002 (may maybe) for one of my poetics classes. It was the first one I did, so as you can imagine... People Props [My Name Here] I watch the Eleanor Rigby’s of life From benches in parks and The bus seats of rapid transit Existing Statues of flesh Living Decorations Breathing Christmas Ornaments Filler They are extras in a movie Or muzak in a mall There to fill the gap That exists without there menial presence They’re on time They crawl on all fours Walk down the aisle and put Both feet in the grave Can they fathom? Running, diving, swinging What they must think as they pass When they see me Sitting On a bench in the park __________________ I've moved to a new address

08-31-2005, 08:41 AM	#8 (permalink)
Hype8 Music Addict Join Date: Mar 2005 Location: california Posts: 191	I actually like this one. Normally poems are a bit dull to me cause of the lack of rhymes and stuff, but I liked this one nice job. __________________

08-31-2005, 06:12 PM	#9 (permalink)
TheBig3 killedmyraindog Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Boston, Massachusetts Posts: 11,172	Thanks, having not seen it since its submission (i got it from the word file) theres alot I would edit, but I do appreciate the sentiment. __________________ I've moved to a new address