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Old 07-02-2007, 08:04 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Default First hip-hop song - The Deliberation

This is the first hip-hop song I ever wrote. I tried to get as far from what seems to be mostly lame hip-hop and rap that is prevalent today, and into more thought out concepts and melodies.

The Deliberation
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As I erase and replace space I watch planets disperse
Redefine time with the mind, and rewrite the laws of the universe

But to design requires wisdom and now I have only power,
I raze my home solar system, watch my own family devoured

By new-found reckless intent, my source of divinity
And now I’ve come to resent this search for infinity

Now as dimensions collide I can feel my own madness worsen,
After all I was once man and I did begin as a person
With a soul and a body and a mind, intertwined,
Past the point of isolation, too caged and chained to divide

Now I transcend expectations of the life that I was living livid
Through cosmic emaciation I hope I can be forgiven

And I’m the perfect example of how the best of intentions
can lead to real consequences and foster hybrid dimensions

Who knows how long I’ve been drifting, past these worlds, through this realm
I’m going down with the ship, but is it as Captain or Helm?

And with near limitless grace, I can deploy ill compositions
Like needle ammunition holstered by your family’s physician

I’ll find a fault in your planet and I’ll span it,
With a spiritual ship and the 2011 prophet pirates who man it

I find a fault in myself, or a friend should I depend
On the visions or signs that some other god sends

What does this choice make of me, a messenger or a master?
The Destiny Architect or simply the one true disaster?

I’m the end, the all mighty, I’m the saviour, the fool
And I know that soon I’ll lose sight of everything but the cruel

And the dead and the dying and the forces dividing
How long till we are extinct, and who are the beings in hiding

And have they learned to prey on perfection and pray for infection
Or kill without human feeling failings like fault or reflection?

Well if not, then it seems that there is some hope we can trust
Now that I’ve come to create something that is greater than us

So am I the light that illuminates life’s only success
Or am I the lowest of evils, too ignorant to confess

I wish in some other place and in some other time
They’ll escape the desolation I have brought forth with my crimes

And that in the space beyond reach of my most blood coated hands
Some dreams will learn to contain me and those dreams will understand
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very interested in feedback, as i've definately never tried writing in this style or using concepts and imagery like this

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Old 07-05-2007, 04:46 AM   #2 (permalink)
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i like it, there is just something about it, it is quite well writen
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