Something I wrote, would love your opinion...
 

I don't really have a title for this ..

You'll never be forgotten
I keep you in my heart
And always remember
we'll never be apart.

You'll always be here
By my side
With me forever
Like an ocean tide.

You were the one
who always knew
Who I was and
What I went through.

You'll always be
My first love
We fit together
Just like a glove.

I think of you
Each and every day
I wish you were here
And didn't go away.

I know your in Heaven
Watching over me
I hope I'm the person
You wanted me to be.

Out of the blue
It happened so fas
You left this earth
But, now that's the past.

It's hard to live
Without you here
But, I look to the future
And try not to fear.

copyright: Cherie Andrews

tis alright, a bit well boring, it was predictable but i do like that ^^^^

lol sucky

es ok. is this something that actually happened? anywho, the fit together like a glove could be changed. only because a glove doesnt fit together, they just fit. there is a plural singular confusion there also, unless you are talking about a glove and a hand... but then once again, they just fit. think about how silly this sounds "this glove fits together perfectly" vs "this glove fits perfectly"... just my 2cents

Hehe

some of the rhyming seems pretty forced, you just need to keep working at writing so that you can find more original, subtle and imaginative concepts and uses of imagery. The two similes are saw were sorta stinkers too... the less thought goes into your metaphors and similies the less well be thinking that an ocean tide is actually forever by your side (?) and more about how long it must have taken you to realize side and tide rhyme. Keep working at it, i want to watch you get better lol.

Thank You for gving me some things to think about and work on..

Great..if your ten years old. It really does'nt say anything that has'nt been said before. However it seems emotionally honest. Kudos to all those who put their words up here. I write some stuff occasionally, but I would never let you lot get hold of it and rip it to shreds!