more of a poem... (quote, artist, talent, song)

cheriejrfan · 06-23-2007, 10:15 PM

But I would love to get some opinions on it... Could it be a song??

You were a little boy.
small, shy, and scared.
That has made you
Who you are today.

You went through Military school,
With loving help from your sister.
That has made you
Who you are today.

You started racing,
You wrecked and won.
That has made you
Who you are today.

You lost your dad,
On that February day.
That has made you
Who you are today.

You got through,
All of the pain.
That has made yu
Who you are today.

With lots of help
From family and friends.
That has made you
Who you are today.

You chose to leave
The team your father built.
That has made you
Who you are today.

Your brave and strong,
And I'm happy to say.
I'm sure your dad is proud
Of who you are today..

(Cheriejrfan)

sleepy jack · 06-23-2007, 10:32 PM

And now someones writing terrible poetry,
About who you are today.

cheriejrfan · 06-23-2007, 10:53 PM

WHAT?????? So you think it's terrible????

This is not something I have been doing for a long time... I have come here for help and advice... you can't help me or give me some good advice??

~~CAPTAIN CAVEMAN~~ · 06-24-2007, 02:31 AM

I'm not experienced in poetry or songwriting, but I think any poem can be a song if it is put to music.

joyboyo53 · 06-26-2007, 03:45 PM

yo cherie chill dont get your panties in a knot. lots of great artist got laughed/kicked out of studios before they became famous. its part of what makes you grow as an artist. if you really care about what everyone thinks, you will get stuck in the idea of entertaining the masses and sacrifice artistic talent. isnt wrong or right, its just your choice.

Bane of your existence · 06-27-2007, 06:49 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by jgd85

yo cherie chill dont get your panties in a knot. lots of great artist got laughed/kicked out of studios before they became famous. its part of what makes you grow as an artist. if you really care about what everyone thinks, you will get stuck in the idea of entertaining the masses and sacrifice artistic talent. isnt wrong or right, its just your choice.

Yeah, but this is really bad.

cheriejrfan · 06-28-2007, 09:45 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Bane of your existence

Yeah, but this is really bad.

I've read some of your, their no better!!!

sleepy jack · 06-28-2007, 04:42 PM

He hasn't even posted any.

cheriejrfan · 06-29-2007, 12:06 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crowquill

He hasn't even posted any.

Oh I'm sorry I thought that was you I was talking to... I guess I should look closer next time!!

~~CAPTAIN CAVEMAN~~ · 06-29-2007, 12:12 AM

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06-23-2007, 10:15 PM	#1 (permalink)
cheriejrfan Groupie Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: TEXAS Posts: 13	more of a poem... But I would love to get some opinions on it... Could it be a song?? You were a little boy. small, shy, and scared. That has made you Who you are today. You went through Military school, With loving help from your sister. That has made you Who you are today. You started racing, You wrecked and won. That has made you Who you are today. You lost your dad, On that February day. That has made you Who you are today. You got through, All of the pain. That has made yu Who you are today. With lots of help From family and friends. That has made you Who you are today. You chose to leave The team your father built. That has made you Who you are today. Your brave and strong, And I'm happy to say. I'm sure your dad is proud Of who you are today.. (Cheriejrfan) __________________ Best Kept Secret In The South...... Texas Girls!! Last edited by cheriejrfan; 06-23-2007 at 11:06 PM.

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cheriejrfan Groupie Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: TEXAS Posts: 13	WHAT?????? So you think it's terrible???? This is not something I have been doing for a long time... I have come here for help and advice... you can't help me or give me some good advice?? __________________ Best Kept Secret In The South...... Texas Girls!! Last edited by cheriejrfan; 06-23-2007 at 11:02 PM.

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~~CAPTAIN CAVEMAN~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: VAN Posts: 2,530	I'm not experienced in poetry or songwriting, but I think any poem can be a song if it is put to music.

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joyboyo53 down the rabbit hole Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: the mountain called monkey Posts: 764	yo cherie chill dont get your panties in a knot. lots of great artist got laughed/kicked out of studios before they became famous. its part of what makes you grow as an artist. if you really care about what everyone thinks, you will get stuck in the idea of entertaining the masses and sacrifice artistic talent. isnt wrong or right, its just your choice.

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